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Tags: almost vore F/M Fox M/F M/M Macro/Micro Mouse mouthplay Wolf
In a world where his species serves as food for larger anthros, a mouse named Tuck seems to have found a lucky break, unfortunately, a typical workday for him is quite hazardous.
I wrote this story a month or so ago, but the vore was all implied. So I decided to add a variety package in for its debut on Eka's. Comments, feedback and suggestions are all welcome.
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Posted by Kusanagi 11 years ago Report
A bit harder than I'm used to, but still quite good. Surprised I didn't make the connection between this and 'Processed' which share a 'A modest proposal', can't remember if that was in the version posted previously though.
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
I actually wrote the original beforehand (are you the Kusanagi I know from Macrophile.com by chance?)and later decided to go back and edit it into connecting with Processed.
Posted by Kusanagi 11 years ago Report
Ah that makes sense, and yes I am the same Kusanagi from M.com. Been here nearly as long, but as most of my stories never get past the implied stage, I don't post much here.
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
Hi *waves*. I had this account here for years before I started posting stories, hence the different name. I've started posting stuff here because I wanted to get out of my "comfort zone" and see if I could break into another field.
So far it's been a fun learning experience. I'd recommend you try it some time fi you come here often.
Posted by Kusanagi 11 years ago Report
I actually do have a story that was posted on these forums that never made it to M.com, just never put it in my gallery, it's a bit out there... http://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=8269
Most of my vore stories have even less redeeming value than that so they never get seen. ^^;
Posted by Marked 11 years ago Report
Nice stories as always. I like that it was a chance to do a little mawplay without the character getting swallowed after. I loved the line about the fox tasting him again and again but never getting to eat him.
Posted by nephilim 11 years ago Report
I, actually, really liked this. It had all of the elements of an engaging read. You wrote from Tuck's POV, which meant that we as the reader only know as much as he does (or is able to admit) so we simultaneously progress through the narrative in lock-step with him.
So each reveal creates a sense of anticipation, doggedly marching us toward the principle scene of the story. The voyeuristic touch was very well done. I also liked that oh-so-important line regarding Vana's desire to have that which she cannot.
You captured the slaughter perfectly; it's almost cavalier, and yet haunting because we are seeing this through Tuck's eyes.
Pacing was great, descriptors were wonderful; sequencing and scene shifts were fluid, creating dramatic tension -- and the premise was so darn cute (:
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
Thanks. I'm glad you like the premise, I'll definitely be using this setting more. And I agree, it's much more tense to have the prey's POV in a situation like this.