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An office saves money by using mice as disposable couriers. Also an attempt to answer the question of how mice attracted to their natural predators could ever survive.
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Posted by DrakeZephyr 11 years ago Report
I'm always intrigued to see these glimpses into your world. I find the moral ponderings it incites in me more enthralling ^.=.^ The odd little ways in which predator and prey live together, the edges of corruption, and of course those who find they have a soft spot for certain morsels, whose company they hold as more delightful than their meat. I look forward to your next addition
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
Thanks for the kind words. And yes, part of the reason I like this world so much is just seeing how much I can twist things in it. Looking forward to your next writing, too.
Posted by Marked 11 years ago Report
Your stories are always good, but this one was particularly interesting. Very sexy, and yet backed up by equal parts interesting characters and implied social commentary. Superb work!
As a side note, I wonder how practical it would be to use words like Todd, Tom and the like as common appellatives? When it comes to a furry world like this, words like Mr., Mrs., Ms. seem insufficient to give all the information you might want to know about a person before meeting them. For example, "Qn. Veronica warned Vx. Denise about Tm. Frank, and in the end, Bk. Ryan saved the day."
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
That could work, and a lot of animal-related fiction like Redwall or even Beatrix Potter does in fact use species-titles like that to remind the readers. Definitely something to think about, thanks.
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
This was terrific! I really loved this one. :)
I think you perfectly captured a kind of relationship I frequently fumble at in my stories.
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
What would that be? I've read your stories and they seem pretty well formed.
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
Perhaps it's just like drawing - I see my own mistakes amplified, and don't tend to notice them in other people's art. I love to try to capture this disparate but affectionate relationship between two creatures - especially when the more powerful one is inclined and entitled to eat the other. The little squeaker collar is a nice addition to the distance between them - his ability to even communicate with her is only a favor granted by her.
Posted by Littledude 11 years ago Report
Oh yeah, that's how it is for everyone, really, it's why outside perspectives are so important for developing crafts, they not only give you confidence to keep doing, but they'll point out mistakes you miss yourself.
And the language barrier was largely thrown in so I didn't have to write every vore scene with gratuitous amounts of begging on the prey's behalf to which the predator had to inevitably ignore or throw out some inane justification for it.
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
Re: the collar - That's a clever technique!
Posted by nephilim 11 years ago Report
I just... I love your writing. It's so robust and colorful with clever, uncanny non-sequiturs, and awesome character interplay.
(:
Posted by Indighost 10 years ago Report
Very cute : )
Posted by MicroNekoGirlPur 10 years ago Report
Not bad. Definitely an interesting story, well worth a read and fave.
Posted by Littledude 10 years ago Report
Thank you very much.
Posted by MicroNekoGirlPur 10 years ago Report
you're welcome.