Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

uh....why did you fav the story then? If its so bad?

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Hi! Thanks for being honest, but I'm not sure I understood your complaints.

Misanthropic? Elaborate please.

When were the werewolves being hypocritical? (Not arguing)

UH, werewolf myths vary by country or region, but historically werewolves could shape-shift whenever the hell they wanted.(Assuming they possessed the required needs for the transformation)


-BTW
Funny that you should mention slavery, one direction I had been considering taking the plot (if you want to call it that, considering you hate it, as is your right.) was a suggested "truce" between the two groups, the werewolves offering to help build a new sort of civilization with the (agriculture based) humans, but in return once humans reached a certain age, they would be used as s food source.

And then there are the werewolves that refused to eat humans, the all-male formerly human military company that preys exclusively on other werewolves, following a strict rule of discipline forbidding them to sate their sexual urges with female humans or werewolves for fear of creating feral offspring, and as a result they pretty much became an army of gay cannibals...which protect humans.

I suppose its been done before.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

(Here's a idea: MAYBE SHE IS ALSO A FUCKING LIAR. Maybe she IS a HYPOCRITE. MAYBE SHE WANTS HIM TO DO WHAT SHE FUCKING SAYS!)

(BTW, she did mention the humans killed all the other food sources...remember her comment about the "occasional stray cat"?)

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

"This story is bad because I disagree with a clearly villainous character"

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Your not serious are you?

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

Nope, I was summarizing what I understood by newenglandee's posts! This story's not 100% my kind of thing, but it was quite enjoyable.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

The air-quotes tipped me off. XD

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

The protagonist.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Uh, thats not the guy in the tower, thats the human the werewolf ran off with.

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

Did you consider giving the story more than the briefest skim before telling the author to never write another story of this kind again? The guy in the second half isn't Decker. You could probably read only every third paragraph and it'd still be clear that the guy in the second half isn't Decker.

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

You couldn't tell? How could you POSSIBLY not tell? Let's do a point by point comparison of what happens to the two men in the first part:

Man - is raped by a female werewolf, infecting him
Decker - is not

Man - is kidnapped by a female werewolf
Decker - is not

Man - has a wife who is raped by a male werewolf and then shot dead by humans because she was infected
Decker - does not

Man - is also with a younger girl who is fleeing wolves but manages to escape
Decker - is not

Every single one of those points is discussed for multiple lines in the second half. The first two are pretty much the whole plot of the second half! And if that's somehow not enough to clue you in, Decker is the narrator and writes about himself in the first person!



As for the rest of what you say, yes that's not a surprise at all. You have a bee in your bonnet about certain things, and it makes you so hypersensitive to them that you're not capable of distinguishing whether a character is supposed to be a villain (or at the very least morally grey) or whether they're the author's voice. Apparently you're in fact so hypersensitive that you can't even be bothered to read and parse the story properly once the red mist descends.

Fine. You don't like something, that's your burden. There are things that I'm overly sensitive to as well, and that's my burden. But apparently where you and I differ is that I don't convince myself that my gripes are objective flaws so that I can vent at the author behind the veneer of "sound criticism". Oh yeah, I didn't like it. In fact I disliked it so much that I didn't read it properly and jumped to conclusions about characters and intentions. Oh, yeah, I guess maybe not reading it and jumping to conclusions might have been part of why I didn't like it. Oh, whatever, I'll just say it was "poorly executed", which sounds like a criticism but actually says nothing at all. After all, a comment can't possibly have any effect other than to alleviate the negative feelings that I got from reading the story. Who gives a shit about the author on the receiving end of my misinformed venting?

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

But you misunderstood HALF of it!

And you wanna know why it wasn't more "thought out"?

Honestly, I made it up as I went along, with no clear ending in mind at the time EXCEPT "DECKER AND LOTS OF DEAD WEREWOLVES"

Honestly, you complain that the stories here are sacrificed for PORN?

I WROTE THIS SPECIFICALLY AS AN EXCUSE FOR WEREWOLF PORN. I KNEW it was goofy as FUCK when i started!

You wanna know what inspired me to write the damn thing?

A movie I heard of called "FEAST"

I wasn't aiming very high. I think I was aiming between the legs, actually...

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Wait, did you say 'Feast'? That satire/horror movie that deliberately mocks the horror genre? THAT'S what you were going for, is that it? Something like that that mocks the stereotypes of horror or survival movies but in a vorish setting?

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

I had never really decided just how dark I wanted to go with the story, how funny it should be. How gory.

Clearly, Decker's sniper buddy is an asshole and deserves a horrible end,( death by weresodomy is my vote.)

I had lots of different influences.

FEAST
The THING (82)
Fallout: New Vegas (pc game)

Evil dead+Aliens (can you say power(saw)loader?)


Take your pick.


Any way... I wasn't taking it too seriously.

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Well, then...

Y'know what? I disregard and disavow my previous statements completely, and apologize for absolutely caddish behavior. Considering your influences AND the fact that it was a very early work, my criticism of this story is just too unfair and harsh. I'm truly sorry.

If you decide to go for something a bit more serious-minded and with more, well, depth, I would be more than happy to read it. This story is a good IDEA, genuinely it is, it just has to be fleshed out properly.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

I believe you mentioned something about another one of my writings. You said it "didn't help much", but you never identified the story or explained, you just left the remark.

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Oh, that would be the one involving the woman who's obviously cheating on her husband. I just thought it was a bit too OBVIOUS in it's intent and a bit too in-your-face for a satirical piece.

Though it DOES actually remind me of a funny joke that works.

"Honey, pack your bags, I won the lottery!"

"Wow! Should I pack for the beach, for a cruise, or what?"

"I don't care, just get the f--k out!"

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

... She isn't cheating on him, she's just got a mean streak. XD OMG CHEATING? No no not at all she is just a big bully! She knows he is a little scared of her but she would never really do anything to hurt him she is just the dominant werewolf bitch of the house.

I have a short comic of them Ill upload soon, the whole story was based on that one commission and the original artists idea of "my werewolf wife" being an old television show akin to "I dream of Genie" or "Bewitched"

Your REALLY gonna hate PRED POV, aren't you? I even put a disclamer on that one...

(The narrator subconsciously knows he is doing wrong and infact the whole damn situation might be fantasy)

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Ah, I did see you do a bit of hand drawn art, I might take a glance at that. And I don't dislike pred points of view! it's just how they come ACROSS is the issue. There's just so many flat, one note pred characters. They have one note and it's "imma eat you, Mwa ha ha" level of sadism which they hit over and over. It gets so dull and so frustrating to read.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Oh i havent put any of those two up YET.

And i didnt draw them, Fenrir Luniras did (i believe i mispelled last name)


"Pred Pov " is a story.

It was an exercise in how nasty I could write a characters behavior before curbing it in the story itself.

Like i said, it puts YOU in the pred pov.... And he is a total ass.

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Well, if such was the intent, you definitely succeeded. I wanted to stab him with a screwdriver.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Id have loved to seen your comments. XDDD

Posted by newenglandee 11 years ago Report

Ohhh, no, no, no. It would have been nothing but screaming. Trust me.

Posted by Boomwolf 11 years ago Report

Well, you didn't say anything about the writing. Its newer.

Posted by maleperduis 11 years ago Report

This would be more convincing if we hadn't already established that the bulk of your "criticism" was such gems as "my bizarre belief that two completely different characters were the same guy made his character arc unbelievable" and "the villain said things I didn't agree with and there was no disclaimer to tell me I was supposed to not agree with her".

Posted by Chameleonette 11 years ago Report

Really interesting concept and take on werewolves and their evolution into an 'epidemic' of sorts. I was pretty sure they were being painted as the 'bad guys' until the people in the fort started cracking jokes and killed the supposed 'infected' humans instead of trying to save them, too. And I questioned it even more after the POV switched. Now I'm not entirely sure who is more in the wrong---not that either are 'right', by any stretch of the imagination.

Posted by DrakeZephyr 11 years ago Report

I wasn't going to read this, I see the words "dark" and "evil" and "Apocalypse" and I normally decide I won't enjoy it, nothing personal. But the bulk of the commentpage drew my eye, and I noticed my name, so I read it, and I read the comments.

I'll say this, it was a little dark for my tastes, but that's just me. Which is a pity, of course, because I see some interesting conflicts in it... I'm a dragony writer, but I often deal with the idea of physical change, of getting to know and to understand prey species on the predator's part. I'll admit, in line with some of the barrage you've had, I'm not sure I understand the mentality of the werewolf... though anger, exploitation of her captive or perhaps some infection on a mental level could explain the... lacking points of logic. The irony I find is the condemnation of humans as such monsterous things, while simultaniously re-enforcing that she herself was once human, doing the precise same things no doubt. I am curious to whether this is some effect of the "infection". Of course, I can't say whether or not this sort of hypocrasy from characters is realistic or not, humans, and by extension these werewolves are likely hypocrites. Ahem, but before I start devolving into such language, I'd also say this. Keep writing, keep going, and take every criticism with a pinch of salt. I've found out the hard way that sometimes, some small aspect of a story rubs an individual up the wrong way, we all have our pet peeves... though, if it's not riddled with spoilers, I would like to know more of how, or if this infection effects the mental aspects of those who get it, or if it is desperation and neccessity that has made the werewolves so. Also, I'm curious, as it's been noted that the werewolves eat people because there's little else, what do the humans eat? I can imagine supplies, but this sounds like a long stretching situation, and no supply cache lasts forever...

Posted by playafreek 10 years ago Report

Eagerly awaiting part two.

Posted by Boomwolf 10 years ago Report

Aww, currently there is no part to planned! D: im focusing on Love conquers maw atm, infact part 4 will be up very soonish.