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This is the first page of the episode. At first there was no plan for comic, So the style of the first page is different.
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Posted by Royal_Starlord 10 years ago Report
I think I see where this is going. °3°
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Hehe..!!!
Posted by 0Anesthetic4u 10 years ago Report
So it's clear english isn't your first language, so I'm going to need to ask a few questions to understand what they are saying and get the proper context.
By "Intelectual creatures" do you mean "Sentient Creatures/Beings"?
I think she's talking about her Vagina with the "Small hole" line, but then she says that she "even showing my pubic(I think you want the word "private". Pubic does mean what you think it means, but it still tends to only be used for pubic hair, and not for the general area) area" line. Which would mean that she's showing her pubic area after the hole no one can get into. So am I missing something, or is the hole she refers to her Vagina in both cases?
Lastly I think you want the words "Innocent Civilian". Otherwise you need to say either An(An is a word for One) Innocent, or innocent people.
Sorry for being a bit of a Grammar Nazi, but I did get legitimately confused, and you can't improve at something unless you know you aren't doing it perfectly.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
In fact, I'm just thank you for telling this. I'm kind of good at writing In my laguage(I think) but It is too much difficult in English... I even have to look up a dictionary to understand what you are saying, and I pretty assure I don't fully understand what you exactly said.
first, Like what you siad, I think "Sentient Creatures/Being" is right. I'll fix it.
second, I will fix the word 'pubic' to 'private', too.
And she is traveling now and being investigated at the frontier of some country. So I chose the word 'traveler'. But If It it still not proper in this situation, I will fix it.
Again, Thank you for telling me with using your time. I'm so appreciated, and If you feel confused again with my art, Would you Please tell me again?
Posted by zekromNLR 10 years ago Report
What is your native language? I might be able to assist in translating, and if I was, I would offer my help.
And in any case, I will gladly also offer my services as a spelling and grammar checker.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Thank you~ but I hesitate to open my native language to the public. Because in my country, making sexual contents is illegal.(what a shame)and these days they are even tring to make a law to imprison people with unusual sexual fetish...
Posted by zekromNLR 10 years ago Report
Okay, well, from that I definitely know I cannot do translating, as we don't have bullshit like this here in Germany.
And I'm sorry to hear that the people who run your country are such stupid intolerant fucktards.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Yeah.. That is just what I want to say..!
Posted by naraku1201 10 years ago Report
Hate to be the guy that writes stuff after three months but Germany use to be that bad when Adolph Hitler ruled because he had jews, children, gays, disabled people, elderly people, babies, ect. Sorry to say it but before Russia and America claimed victory there were a lot of as you say fucktards in Germany like the S.S. and again Adolph Hitler and I'm not saying your country is bad. It was just the people who ruled at that time cause look at America now. We have that damn Berry "Barak" Obama in office now and he wasn't even born in the U.S. either. He is also a Muslim but sorry for writing all of this. I was bored.
Posted by Hereforvore 10 years ago Report
That's pretty brutal.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Yeah.. That is what I say..!
Posted by 0Anesthetic4u 10 years ago Report
The travler part wasn't the problem. You refered to her the seccond time as "Cops are good for innocent, right", this should be "Cops are good to innocent travlers". Innocent is a description. You could get away "Cops are good to Innocents" though, it doesn't work as nicely, but it works.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Thank you! I'll fix It, too~!
Posted by 0Anesthetic4u 10 years ago Report
You're very welcome.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
And the small hole is the pubic area, the both words mean her vagina! sorry for confusing!
Posted by Bright 10 years ago Report
Haha, very nice hand print there.
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Thank you!
Posted by andymcc76 10 years ago Report
She's one good-looking lamia! Very unusual start to a great story by the looks of it!
Posted by SeekGr 10 years ago Report
Thank you! I hope It can be end up unusual, too~