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A college student is forced to endure a rather strange gift or prank from her roommate.
My first story not primarily featuring unbirth. Though I've got some planned in a later chapter
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Posted by Chaos 10 years ago Report
Nice job, it was a great story with an interesting premise. I liked the explanation about what a Compression torque is.
Posted by Radijs 10 years ago Report
It was mostly a note to myself. But while I was writing I realized that I couldn't really explain it through the story without really making it look like exposition. So I left it in.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 10 years ago Report
Simply amazing Radijs. Can't wait for the next part. ;3
Posted by vulwulf 10 years ago Report
Nice though I think I should mention a couple things, at the start is wasn't clear the "I" was a female, possibly the effect of first person view. May want to make it more clear, Though I honestly think third person view would be best, you could experiment making a third and fist person view to see what people like better.