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this is a follow-up to "unable to forget an ex-girlfriend" but it could be taken as a stand-alone story itself imo. As I stated in my previous story, comments and criticism are well received. There are probably some typos or grammar mistakes, so if you find one put it in the comments section and I will correct it if it's a very important one. Remember my native language is not English so it could happen!
By the way this story is highly influenced by Hermlover21 ones, specially Both birthday breakfast and Motherly Love. so if by any chance you enjoy this story I recommend to you to check his stories, since they are probably better than mine!
Warning:SCAT
Description: Violet doesn't know where or what happened to her brother. Later she founds out it has something to do with her brother's ex-girlfriend. After that, something unexpected happens.
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Posted by NecrolanceZX 10 years ago Report
Very nice story! Though I did notice that you named Cassandra's new boyfriend the same as her old one. xD
Posted by NecrolanceZX 10 years ago Report
Er, I should say... Violet's brother and the new boyfriend are named the same. Confused me for a moment.
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
oh wow, huge mistake!!! i'm terribly sorry. it is fixed now.
thx for the comment!!
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
I'm not going to lie but this story is pretty good, but if you say your inspired by Hermlover21 then Im not going to lie again but wouldn't have made more sense for you to write the vore sequence in same-size format?
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
Yeah i know what you mean. It is true I was deeply inspired by hermlover stories but i try to make it my own style too because i didn't want to be a mere imitator, i have my own tastes.
Another reason I am using macro/micro is because it is easier for me to imagine and describe the scene. As weird as it could sound i find more realistic to eat a micro than stuffing a normal size human.
I am really glad you liked it and I hope my reasons were enough to answer your question. If you have more questions or any critic ifeel free to ask again. I take in consideration the comments to improve my future stories.
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
Given that you have written same-size vore since then would you consider remaking this as same -size?
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
mmm...remaking the whole story just to be same size is not something i have in mind right now.
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
I was not talking about the whole story only the second chapter, but i doubt that change anything.
Posted by joeburp22181 10 years ago Report
Cool story, didn't think it would end that way, the way it began with the sister being all mad, I thought it might be her that got revenge, it was a nice twist to see the person who devoured Violet's brother Cass, eat her as well, willingly becoming something as beautiful as their devourer. Nice work.
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
I'm really glad you like it! I thought it would be better if Cass could vore both brothers, i cannot explain why but i think it is way hotter than the other way around.
Thx for the comment!
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
both brothers? what do you mean, i thought they were brother sisters, and what do you mean with other way around?
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
yeah sorry, here in Spain it is correct to say brothers even if one of them is a girl. i meant brother and sister
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
but we are not speaking Spanish are we?
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
Yeah I said sorry. I feel like you are just trolling with this comment and the one you say you doubt that anything woud change if i wrote this with same size, even though you were the one that suggested it
Posted by rugli 10 years ago Report
IF thats how you feel then im sorry, since I thought you could take a little joke :( as for the other comment I thought I wasn't too clear what I was referring to in any case.
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
If it was a joke than i apologize to you. I can take jokes and criticism, in fact i appreciate when people do it, so i can improve. But sometimes it is hard to take a comment as a joke or sarcasm when it is only written without any context.
The fact is i am sorry if i did not take it as i should have and if i did not understand your suggestion, then explain it to me and i will take it in consideration.
Posted by Koseki 10 years ago Report
Thx, i agree with you. That was my main objective, to create a good context, i'm glad you noticed!
Thx for the comment!!
Posted by AegisOfRoses 8 years ago Report
I love the teasing, it's some of the best parts in Vore stories!
Posted by Koseki 8 years ago Report
i know , right?. thx for the comment