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A story of a human girl and her village, set in the Scorbyverse. Made with permission, and probably not the last I produce in that setting.
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Posted by Scorby 10 years ago Report
This is great. I feel like there are elements of the Scorbyverse that I hinted at but never explicitly spelled out, and you clearly picked up on them and worked them into your story, so clearly my hinting worked.
One issue, but I'm totally going to let it slide. There's a concept that I've always considered "Scorbyverse canon" but never explicitly included in any of my stories: There can never be a monetary exchange for a lizardman to eat a human. While it's perfectly reasonable -- and therefore legal in both kingdoms -- for the lizardfolk to eat a species so perfectly suited to be its prey, an exchange of money makes it uncomfortably close to slave trading. And both species, civilized as they are, consider slavery barbaric.
But I'm not even sure your story violates that. Your system of monetary compensation is a little more complicted than straight-up buying women. And even if it's not, I'm inclined to say "Eh, you beat me to it before I officially established the rule, so it's officially not a rule anymore."
Posted by Eater99 10 years ago Report
Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate you spending the time to put all this together, and I'd like to hear your thoughts on any future things I set in your universe, as long as you're okay with me making them.
As for the payment thing, the way I see it, for one it's not universal, and for two, it's more meant to be a fine for inconveniencing the family than as a purchase, for all that characters describe it as such.
Posted by sevensix 5 years ago Report
Aren't Lizardfolk anthro creatures?
Posted by alockwood1 2 years ago Report
An interesting story.