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Lexi and Julia go out looking for the rest of the HDTF crew, but their detector leads them on a brief detour.
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This is actually the first half of what I'd intended to post, but it's taking me so long to find enough time to finish, I cut it off at a reasonable point. We'll probably get a glimpse into the unscrupulous workings of the corp that kidnapped the rest of the crew in the next story.
I also didn't proofread this. So it's worse than usual, probably.
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Posted by DRayElliott 8 years ago Report
Yes! New story, first comment.
Posted by DRayElliott 8 years ago Report
I must be psychic, cause it was uploaded only an hour ago.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Hopefully that alleviates your withdrawal symptoms for a while.
Posted by DRayElliott 8 years ago Report
Yep, especially since I have to edit them, cause the stories download in rtf format and the tablet I use to download them can't display rtf without an active connection to the net, so I have to change them to text format. But when I do, " turns into \rdblquote so I have to go through and fix everything. Which I don't really mind, since it lets me fix spelling errors. Which exist. Like irretrievability. I think you meant retrievability.
Posted by DRayElliott 8 years ago Report
Argh, txt not text, stupid autocorrect.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
I never realized how many people download these things for later use.
Posted by RLord4268 8 years ago Report
Dude...I'm running out of adjectives. I don't even know how to construct a sentence describing how great this chapter was that won't sound like the eulogy of a communist dictator at a state sponsored funeral. "He was the greatest human being to have walked the earth!"
Every single layer of kink and manipulation I could have hoped for. I like that Julia is slightly dominant and always ends up "punishing" the male characters. If this is the first half, I can't wait to see how kinky the baddies are!
This needs to be drawn into a comic...honestly. You sir, are the king of kink.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Thank you very much! I'm glad you approve.
Posted by Vitric 8 years ago Report
+1
Posted by Raskarroth 8 years ago Report
I agree with RLord4268, This whole series would make one epic Manga/Hentai story.
Your grammar and sentene structures are still far supperior to what I usually come across if it's not proof read, I didn't really notice any glaring issues with it.
Glad everything is ok, No need to rush to get the stories out quality of quantity is better!. Just my advice is to drop a message in so people don't get worried something happened, very weird rummours can start circulating when a regularly posting author/artist disapears.
Looking forward to the next chapter, you've kept us in suspense of what the corps intentions are for long enough.
I like how Julia dealt with the piece of shit that thinks he can sell anything..
Interesting new side effect :P
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
I'd be kind of curious to see what sort of rumors would start in my absence. However, with the exception of prolonged absence from an internet connection if ever there is any doubt as to my condition, a comment or PM will probably get a reply.
Posted by Raskarroth 8 years ago Report
hah so would I, last one the story was hospital and coma, only to turn out he wanted to look after his child etc.
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 8 years ago Report
Interesting this chapter rather highlights some of the less ethical potential of the HDTF tech.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Yeah, it's a highly abusable device.