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Commission for max123. Originally finished 21 Jan 2016 / Edited and re-uploaded July 2020
A hungry predator takes to her favorite hunting grounds - the local mall. There, she comes across two appetizing twins. The hunt is on for Melyssa's lunch!
I'm really happy with this one came out. I loved the idea and had a ton of fun writing it. Please let me know your thoughts!
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Posted by hamletvalley 9 years ago Report
That was really well done :3
Comes up a bit short at the very end but it really shows you had a lot of fun writing the pred!
Posted by Halcyon 9 years ago Report
I tend to agree with you there, I think I got a little burnt out towards the end. But I definitely loved this pred! I'm glad you enjoyed the story ^.^
Posted by Junogray 9 years ago Report
Not half bad, quite liked it
Ps. the thumbnail I believe is of Melyssa, the linked image is of the twins only (just saying)
Posted by Halcyon 9 years ago Report
Thanks for pointing that out! I fixed it now with the new source. Not sure where I messed that up, I must have originally planned to have the twins as the reference image. Thanks ^^;
Posted by greggarkits 8 years ago Report
You probably don't have it anymore, but do you think you could post the link to the image you used for the twins?
Posted by Halcyon 8 years ago Report
Well I couldn't find the original link on Gelbooru, but here's another link to it. Hopefully this still works by the time you see it~ http://img.moeimg.net/wp-content/uploads/archives4/4772/1_0sxbz2qdk2.jpg
Posted by greggarkits 8 years ago Report
Wunderbar. As adorable as I imagined~
Posted by minasan 9 years ago Report
I really like this kind of story where there's a sort of secrecy to the predator and you can't even see that they've eaten someone even as they're struggling inside them.
Posted by Halcyon 8 years ago Report
Heheh, thanks~ That was one of my favorite parts about writing it. Just another way the pred had complete dominance over her prey!
Posted by greggarkits 8 years ago Report
I thought I had favorited this a while ago, but I guess I didn't :p. Thankfully I found it again!
This story has everything: Underage prey, fatal digestion, plenty of taunting, and a stealthy tummy~ (And twin prey, which was something I didn't know I loved before reading this O\\\o). I think this is one of my favorite stories on the site!
Posted by Halcyon 8 years ago Report
Thank you so much! Your kind praise means a lot to me. I'm very happy that you enjoyed it, and I hope you like my other works as well. I know I certainly had a lot of fun writing this one!
Posted by greggarkits 8 years ago Report
I love many of your other stories as well!
Aquatic Hunger was actually the first one of yours I read; it's another of my favorites~
Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report
Looking back at this story, I can't help but have two thoughts.
A: I miss the original thumbnail, showing Melyssa. Did some reverse searching and glad to still have an image of her downloaded at the time.
B: Wish there's a sequel involving her. Maybe going on a sort of "digestive feast" in ingesting another group of victims, as her latest digested 'batch' starts simmering down into her intestines. And keeps on doing it all day, occasionally expelling/flushing the remains past a certain point?
Or well, "Toilet predation", with nobody being the wiser, until she's long gone...