this is a good story but the text should have a space after a full stop so we can read it better, just letting you know so when you do more stories they will have a better layout for everyone to read.
Where are you seeing the needed space? Every sentence I see has a space after it.
Also, things read a lot easier if downloaded and read as an rtf in a comfortable Word environment, I really recommend that. The text-display on our site here could be a lot better.
when I say a space I mean have a small gap from one where the full stop is and where the start of the next line is so people won't get a headache reading it or lose where they are reading up to.
My goodness, that was hot! The way she teased it, flushing her clothes as if it was a normal way to flirt, wondering the whole time why... it was amazing and delicious to read!
Thinking about this again, dangit. The flirty, vorish dynamic she has with this toilet! And with her clothes, saying bye bye to them and such. It's like how I fantasize about acting with my spouse, put either of us in either role, then have objects and/or people as the clothes. And the dialog sounds almost like her clothes are people. She's in this mode of having fun and being silly treating objects as if they were sentient (not quite understanding that she's in that mode because one of them is) but it also speaks to my inanimate TF fetish on so many levels, not even counting that the romance partner she's feeding the things to is a toilet. They might as well be two humans and a bed, and the flushed things a plate of chocolate dipped strawberries or a set of sex toys for how she acts with them.
My goodness, I'm in a rambley mood.
Ah! It has taken me far to long to respond to this! I'm sorry.
As the writer, I'm really glad that you're thinking so much about this. And you have a really interesting interpretation of the story too. It wasn't something that I had on my mind when I was writing it, but it does seem to fit pretty well.
I'll have to keep that in mind for future stories. I had actually planned on making things far more explicit, but I wasn't sure how people would react to what I had in mind. Having read your reply though, it makes me think I could use the things I left out of this story in a new one.
Intrusive, very erotic
though I do have a question if you were to do a chapter two would it continue with Celina and her new mother or would you have a similar setup to this story and ad another girl to the pot so to speak
Posted by DRayElliott 9 years ago Report
This was...interesting.
Posted by RainArt 9 years ago Report
Thank for commenting! Is there anything you'd like to see in the future?
Posted by ken115 9 years ago Report
this is a good story but the text should have a space after a full stop so we can read it better, just letting you know so when you do more stories they will have a better layout for everyone to read.
Posted by Critchett 9 years ago Report
Where are you seeing the needed space? Every sentence I see has a space after it.
Also, things read a lot easier if downloaded and read as an rtf in a comfortable Word environment, I really recommend that. The text-display on our site here could be a lot better.
Posted by ken115 9 years ago Report
when I say a space I mean have a small gap from one where the full stop is and where the start of the next line is so people won't get a headache reading it or lose where they are reading up to.
Posted by RainArt 9 years ago Report
I didn't know how it was going to look when I posted it... Could you link me to a story that has a format that you like so I can what it looks like?
Posted by ken115 9 years ago Report
like this https://aryion.com/g4/view/339060
Posted by ken115 9 years ago Report
or like this https://aryion.com/g4/view/333144
Posted by RainArt 9 years ago Report
Thank you! I see what you mean now, and I'll try to do something closer to those next story.
Posted by Critchett 9 years ago Report
Absolutely one of my favorite short stories I've read. It's like you read my mind. =)
Posted by RainArt 9 years ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad you that like it! Should be more to come I hope.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report
My goodness, that was hot! The way she teased it, flushing her clothes as if it was a normal way to flirt, wondering the whole time why... it was amazing and delicious to read!
Posted by RainArt 9 years ago Report
Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!
Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report
Thinking about this again, dangit. The flirty, vorish dynamic she has with this toilet! And with her clothes, saying bye bye to them and such. It's like how I fantasize about acting with my spouse, put either of us in either role, then have objects and/or people as the clothes. And the dialog sounds almost like her clothes are people. She's in this mode of having fun and being silly treating objects as if they were sentient (not quite understanding that she's in that mode because one of them is) but it also speaks to my inanimate TF fetish on so many levels, not even counting that the romance partner she's feeding the things to is a toilet. They might as well be two humans and a bed, and the flushed things a plate of chocolate dipped strawberries or a set of sex toys for how she acts with them.
My goodness, I'm in a rambley mood.
Posted by RainArt 8 years ago Report
Ah! It has taken me far to long to respond to this! I'm sorry.
As the writer, I'm really glad that you're thinking so much about this. And you have a really interesting interpretation of the story too. It wasn't something that I had on my mind when I was writing it, but it does seem to fit pretty well.
I'll have to keep that in mind for future stories. I had actually planned on making things far more explicit, but I wasn't sure how people would react to what I had in mind. Having read your reply though, it makes me think I could use the things I left out of this story in a new one.
Posted by unicorn 8 years ago Report
Wow, this is great! Wonderful writing, really uh... sucks the reader in :P
Posted by RainArt 8 years ago Report
Thank you! I'm very happy that you enjoyed it.
Posted by Belloc 8 years ago Report
This was very very good. Your level of detail and the raw sensuality of some of your descriptions is absolutely enviable. Fantastic work.
Posted by RainArt 8 years ago Report
Wow, thank you!
Posted by blackking 7 years ago Report
Intrusive, very erotic
though I do have a question if you were to do a chapter two would it continue with Celina and her new mother or would you have a similar setup to this story and ad another girl to the pot so to speak
Posted by RainArt 7 years ago Report
The second part, as it is right now, is focused on two new girls. But this isn't the last we've heard of Celina though.
Posted by mifigor19 6 years ago Report
I sometimes wish I was in her place
Posted by RainArt 6 years ago Report
It'd be interesting, wouldn't it?
Posted by mifigor19 6 years ago Report
Yes