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With the recent flux of Shantae vore, I was rather tempted to write my own. So, here's my take on the Giga Mermaid boss fight, and I have to say... I think I like my version better.
Hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.
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Posted by Draconatedz 8 years ago Report
It could have went a little more into detail at the end, but excellent first story, pal.
Posted by TallTummyTales 8 years ago Report
Well... Thank you for the criticism. It's very useful and I haven't gotten very much up until this point, but Ive actually been writing vore for around a year now and publishing my mostly short stories on Tumblr. It's just that I recently decided to open a gallery on here to upload the pieces I feel turn out well.
Thank you for the tip, and Ill try to keep it in mind moving forward!
Posted by Draconatedz 8 years ago Report
Interesting. The concept of a belly full of many small girls is appealing to me, despite my preference for same size. I think your detail was on point, you just sort of fizzled out at the end too quickly. I especially like Shantae blending in with the others, to the point she was unrecognizable. Try going through all the stomach processes along the way, such as more detail about their demise, and what happens to them.
Posted by TallTummyTales 8 years ago Report
Noted, though in general even when I do go more detailed I try to avoid going overly graphic in digestion. I prefer to have it... goopy, I suppose, rather than bloody. If I were to rewrite it it would probably be somewhere along the lines of...
Within minutes, acid started soaking through the girls. Those who found themselves on the outer edges of the pile, pressed into the stomach walls, didn't even have a chance. It didn't take long for them to start melting away into puddles of sludge. The panicked reactions of those around them only hastened the process as they were kicked deeper into the stomach, those around them trying as hard as they could to get away from the acid as it churned in.
For Shantae, however, her position closer to the middle of it all meant that she was relatively safe... for the time being, at least.
Though she wasn't completely spared. Drops of acid found their way through the girls surrounding her, causing a tingling sensation where they hit bare skin... and causing her to become more and more exposed where they hit her clothes.
Small holes turned into giant gaps in the fabric. After only a few moments, even what little was left was threadbare at best, and was easily torn away by the motions of the maidens surrounding her.
It felt like an eternity of struggling against the smooth, supple bodies around her before the acid finally made its way to Shantae, and when it did, it treated her as it did anything else that landed in the Giga Mermaid's stomach. Shantae's soft skin didn't stand a chance. The tingling sensation enveloped her entire body as the acid churned across her. She reached out for help... only for her fingers to fail to grasp anything. In fact... it felt like they just... melted away...
In the end, once Shantae's body was softened by the acid surrounding her, it was the panicked thrashings of the women she came to save that made her body lose all consistency, and drip through the maidens below her into the ever growing soup below.
Before long, the shouting, the thrashing... everything... it all came to an end. A thick sludge was the only thing that filled the Giga Mermaid's stomach, and whatever was left of Shantae was somewhere inside. Trying to find where in the mess she was, though... No one in sequin land, not even her closest friends would be able to do that.
The Giga Mermaid woke up the next morning, her stomach devoid of even a trace of the massive meal that filled her yesterday. As her stomach growled, she made her way back to the factory, ready to start the process all over again.
Posted by Draconatedz 8 years ago Report
Very excellent change. I'm a fan of goopy stuff myself, so this is great.
It is possible change the file you have on here. Simply change the text, save the file, and change the filename. You'll find reupload on here under edit, and it will change later(this has confused me in the past, it doesn't update instantly).
Posted by TallTummyTales 8 years ago Report
Ah, that is very helpful! Thank you very much! I just made the chage, and am waiting for it to update now.
Glad to hear you liked the change! I'm pretty happy with it myself!
Posted by Zalzas 8 years ago Report
Got to love a tummy stuffed with squirming cuties. Poor Shantae, she just makes such good monster chow!
Posted by TallTummyTales 8 years ago Report
Doesn't she? With so many cuties around her, it's such a shame that none of them ever saw Shantae for what she was really worth. At least the Giga Mermaid's now fixed that.