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Batari has to deal with her brother getting bullied at the magical school they attend, but ends up solving the problem in a way neither of them expected.
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Someone really wanted me to write sibling vore, so I indulged them this once. If that sort of thing is not your cup of tea, probably you want to skip this story. There's a passing mention of scat, but no detail.
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Posted by AngryPuffins 7 years ago Report
I'd love a sequal; Batari's a great pred and the magical setting has plenty of avenues for her to dive into taboo. I'm a big fan of a good vore based escalation curve, and I'd love to see Batari's ravenous rise to power, ending up as the immortal ruler of the institution, all her enemies ground beneath her heel or into her gut.
Posted by mojo-2131285 7 years ago Report
I second
Posted by Cancer 7 years ago Report
I wish that scat scene was longer. Otherwise the story was very well written. The ethnicity and culture of the characters was an interesting take.
I'm not a huge fan of magic, but you did it well and it was within the scope of the story, so GG.
Would really love to see more family vore from you in the future.
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
Haha I thought of you at this point, but I couldn't think of a believable way there'd be that much left of him after what he went through.
Posted by FaultyVault 7 years ago Report
Every time I thought the level of dominance enacted by Batari couldn't escalate any further, it did so with as little concern for my opinion as it did Raja's. Loved it.
Posted by FaultyVault 7 years ago Report
Oh, I also have to mention that I think your use of simile is superb. "The last fragment of his existence still vexed her, like a worn lollipop that she couldn't quite break with her teeth". SO good. Did you have to think on this very long, or does it just come naturally after writing as many stories as you have?
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
The particular one came on its own, though I did spend a lot longer polishing this one than I normally do (thanks to a large summer hiatus in the middle.)
Sometimes the muse is kind. :)
Posted by FaultyVault 7 years ago Report
Do you think your muse will ever tempt you towards other varieties of vore?
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
Such as?
Posted by FaultyVault 7 years ago Report
Anal vore or Unbirth comes to mind.
Posted by Straxacore 7 years ago Report
An amazing story that I love. Soooo good ^_^
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
Too kind /blush/
Posted by Straxacore 7 years ago Report
You are amazing and deserve a reward. :)
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
Praise is my life-force, so thank you! <3
However, I'm too crafty to accept rewards from folks around here, it always ends the same way. >.>
Posted by Straxacore 7 years ago Report
I must insist you accept your reward. You can trust me >:)
I mean :), yes much more innocent
Posted by Spider8Fiend 7 years ago Report
Well, this was a lot of fun! This is the first story by you that I've read, so I don't know if this story is part of a larger series or not, but I do appreciate the world building: it feels like all of this happens in a concrete fantasy world with rules and order, even if that's not the focus of the story. It keeps people entertained on
Multiple fronts, like many good stories should. On the whole, great job!
... I also liked the sheer level of domination of Raja's body and soul, and Batari's rationalizations. It was both thrilling and realistic. I look forward to seeing more of Batari, if this is part of a larger series or not.
Posted by Dooot 3 years ago Report
excellent story. hope we get a seauel.