Posted by joeburp22181 7 years ago Report

Not a bad story. I only noticed a few misspelled words. You conveyed the gist of what you were trying to get across. The only thing I think could have used more detail, was the swallowing part at the end. Whether you intentionally just glossed over the digestive part, it would make sense for the prior. But perhaps personal preferences of mine, a bit more interaction with the post vore, would have been nice. Good job with the way the couple met up though, I loved the ultimate betrayal, and the build up before it. I would have liked to hear more words from her about him, especially her talking to him once she had finished off devouring him alive, just to mock him, before he'd died. But perhaps that might be a bit too dark for your liking though.

Nice piece all together. Thanks for sharing it here on the gallery. Good luck in future writings!

Posted by noego 7 years ago Report

I did try to extend the last parts but I came up empty. I just can't provide description and detail beyond the necessary elements to build the story, I think, though I do purposefully not describe characters in depth so people can project more of their ideas on them. If I spent a lot of time on them I'd never finish the story, which has actually happened in the past.

But I just wrote three things ever in my life, all in the gallery so this might change. Though I'm not much of a writer, I do like to contribute whenever I can find the inspiration. Will keep your comment in mind for when my muse decides to whisper into my brain again. Thanks!

Posted by joeburp22181 7 years ago Report

My pleasure!

Posted by Bright 7 years ago Report

I enjoyed reading this story

Posted by noego 7 years ago Report

Glad to hear that :).