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What if Spike ate Rarity in secret of my excess, today we investigate this out come.
this is full of foreshadowing for something that will come later in the forgotten one, but i was trundling over this in labs waiting for some dna reactions to occur over the last few days, so i just wrote some fetish stuff.
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Posted by ArtaxIsSleeping 6 years ago Report
"No, that’s not true, that’s impossible"
I see what you did there.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
I hate sand XD
Posted by PonyThroat 6 years ago Report
poor spike
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
its fine, it was just a dream, right?
Posted by DarkPinkie 6 years ago Report
For a moment I was like "Oh god! Flurryheart? Emagerd don't he know that Secret of my Excess is before Cadance and Shining armour even marry? 0/1 worst story." Then it later came to him waking up and it all being a dream I was like. "Oh, it all makes sense actually." Good show lad (or lass).
Also, sleep eating his plushies, it's something I could see spike do actually.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
aye, glad you enjoyed it, you picked up on one of the hints i dropped that it was a dream, as Spikes biggest fear is being ostracised by his friends/ family. because of that his subconscious adds pony's like Cadance and Flurryheart even though the timeline wouldn't normally allow it., as the mind isnt able to make up faces, only project those you have seem in neurologists are to be believed.
the idea for him eating the plushies came from a friend of mine, who mentioned that Spike had a little Rarity plush, and i was like man that would be good for foreshadowing.
again glad you enjoyed it, as i have a few more adventures for spike planned, of the most vorish kind might i add ;).
Posted by Speedyblupi 5 years ago Report
There are a lot of unncessary apostrophes in plurals. It says "pony's" where it should say "ponies" in several places.
Posted by doomfister 5 years ago Report
Aye, this was a problem in my earlier works, i have basically learned how to write doing my stories. Like shit you not i didn't know what a comma was when i started about a year ago.
Posted by doomfister 5 years ago Report
i have been meaning on going back and cleaning up some of my older works, but haven't had the time.
Posted by Philosoraptor 5 years ago Report
One of the funniest "graphic vore and scat" stories I have ever read, and based on my favorite episode! Here's a typo I found: his guilty and the punishment is death (he's) Hope you will do more Spike for while in his jumbo size. Thanks for sharing!
Posted by doomfister 5 years ago Report
will correct that now, and jumbo spike is fuun, i wanted to parody the nightmare where you wake up taking a exam or whatever you haven't studied for. hopefully this succeeded in that goal.
Posted by SleeperDragon 9 months ago Report
I understand why his stomach was having a hard time
Posted by doomfister 9 months ago Report
A mare sized meal makes alot of mess XD