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I'm a fan of Hermlover21 and his story Rarity's Delight (check it out-https://aryion.com/g4/view/239200), and I decided to write a sequel (and likely more) of what happens next. In the original story, Rarity devoured Pinkie Pie by her request, and mentions that she would send along their friends next. Well, Rarity is about to get her next "guest" today...
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Posted by DoctorSirus 6 years ago Report
It's so sweet that AJ would give herself over so completely to her friend. Now that's devotion right there, knowing full well you'd be circling the drain and dumped right in the sewer.
Posted by Daniel14541 6 years ago Report
So where can the original be found?
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 6 years ago Report
Look up Hermlover21 in the search engine. Or just search the Rarity tag and look at the last page or two, it's an old story.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 5 years ago Report
Hello again Daniel, just in case you haven't gotten around to reading the original Rarity's Delight, I edited the description to include the link. I didn't remember until recently that that works, eh-heh-heh...
Posted by Shawpony 6 years ago Report
When are you uploading another
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 6 years ago Report
I can't give a definitive time-frame, but I work on my stories weekly, and this took me about 9 months to complete, that's all I can say.
Posted by Gutswimmer 6 years ago Report
I have to say, I'm a pretty big fan of the pacing in this. The flashbacks are well placed to provide context and nothing felt like it dragged on for to long. Even the non-vorish bits felt like they were in service of the vore itself. And I like the way you stuck each character to their personality (as much as is permissible in a vore fanfiction, anyway). Rarity's naturally majestic yet remarkably matter-of-fact predatory attitude coupled with AJ's demureness as prey really helped carry the erotic atmosphere of the story. Aside from my own personal bias on the subject matter, this was a well put together story.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 6 years ago Report
I went off of the original work's portrayal both in the pacing and the characters to a certain extent, while trying to give a little more dialogue and structure for this. My point with the flashback was also to kind of bridge between the story by Hermlover21 and this one, as well as create more of a setup for all of Rarity's friends being eaten. I appreciate the sense of the non-vore parts, as that was exactly the point I was going for (and lampshaded with the stomach growl part to bring it back to the vore) and also, such as with the conversation between Rarity and Applejack to cover issues few straightforward vore stories tackle, such as that Applejack has a loving and full family at home. Thank you for the thoughts, I'm glad you liked the way I put the story together, and I hope you'll like the next ones.
Posted by Gutswimmer 6 years ago Report
Yes, that was something that I wanted to touch on, as well. One thing most vore stories skip out on is that sense of foreplay. Something to give the prey a backstory that really makes you care about the fact that they're about to be consumed forever (Juicefox does it in a few of his works, and his text adventure "A Farewell Feast" is one of the single most erotic experiences I've ever had online). This is something that you did well in this story by establishing that AJ really is leaving something behind; her farm, her friends, and her family will all feel the weight of her absence. And that makes it all the more delicious when she takes that final plunge.
Anyway, sorry for the wall of text. I just wanted to encourage that aspect of your writing.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 6 years ago Report
I'm writing the first paragraph of the next one right now (I just stopped for the day not 10 seconds ago), and I'm writing some of that aspect already.
Posted by donutbrittle 6 years ago Report
I can't tell you how happy I am to see this. The original has its flaws, but is one of my absolute favorites, one that I've come back to over and over again. "Willing" seems like a dying genre these days, and it's great to see that someone else understands and appreciates it.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 6 years ago Report
Glad to get positive feedback from a reader of the original. I hope my series will continue to satisfy your craving for Willing vore.
Posted by Deleteduser89324b 5 years ago Report
Nice work, do you take requests?
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 5 years ago Report
I'm not opposed to the idea, but I can't promise I can crank it out quickly or work on it right away (I've still got this series to do and I have work on other sites to finish).
If none of the above bothers you than sure, shoot me something.
Posted by Deleteduser89324b 5 years ago Report
None of that bothers me i sent you a PM with the idea
Posted by AlbanyExpression 5 years ago Report
I keep coming back to this story. The casual, cruelty-free nature of what is very obviously going to be a fatal act... I think, in particular, the repeated references to how AJ is going to soon be waste, and that she's fine with that, really work wonders on me. Super well done.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 5 years ago Report
I got both of those from the original work, so the author gets some credit for that. I intend to keep those things as I go on with this series. I appreciate the favorite and hope you will enjoy my next story when I have it up.
Posted by Slimshod 5 years ago Report
This was a very enjoyable read. There isn't much I can say that Gutswimmer hasn't so just know I echo his sentiments. The biggest draw was everything leading up to the vore scene and during it. All of that stuff really helped set the scene and create the right kind of atmosphere.
Looking forward to tge others!
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 5 years ago Report
I'm already much further on my second draft, and I'm about to get to the eating part. I intend to write in it today, and hope to finish it within the coming few weeks.
I have plenty of foreplay and setup in this one as well, and I'm flattered and glad you and Gutswimmer enjoy that. I hope you enjoy the coming one as well.
I'm honestly surprised no one's tried to guess who's next to be a pile in Rarity's toilet...
Posted by Slimshod 5 years ago Report
Cool! Looking forward to reading more.
Hmmmm if I had to guess I'd say Twilight or RD.
Posted by sevensix 5 years ago Report
Congrats on getting a favorite from Hermlover himself.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 5 years ago Report
Mmm-hmm.
Posted by Nebbie 1 month ago Report
Hmm, it seems like there might be a missing transition from the library to Rarity's bedroom here. One moment, it's 6 characters in the library, as AJ responds, the next, it's just Rarity and AJ, with Rarity on her bed.
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 1 month ago Report
Flashback.