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A story in which a hapless nerd finds himself responsible for satisfying the cannibalistic appetite of the school's star athlete.
PLEASE NOTE: That this story takes place in a world where primary, secondary and tertiary (college/university) education are all combined. These characters are approximately 20/21 years old.
So here's the story I promised back in January. I actually ended up completely re-writing it from scratch to cut out a lot of unnecessary world-building and background details. Yes, I know there's a big old expositionary dump at the beginning to develop the setting of a female-dominated society (which is one I've had rattling around in my head for a while) so feel free just to skim that part if the setting making sense isn't something you require in your erotic fiction and just want to get onto the "good stuff".
As always, please please please think about leaving a comment and letting me know what you do/don't like.
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Posted by Anokesz 7 years ago Report
Cool premise and some fun world building which i enjoyed the exploring of and thought the assignment was a good exposition dump. Off to a strong start imho.
He will have to get a move on though and submit his Page Program forms asap or i will beat him to it ;)
Posted by glargicus 7 years ago Report
Thanks man, glad you liked it! It's a world idea I've been playing around with in my head for a fair while, actually ended up being toned down a bit from the first draft to focus on the school aspect a bit more. I just really wanted to provide a good enough reason for gigantic, cannibalistic Jock/Cheerleaders to exist to make suspension of disbelief a little easier for people like me that are sticklers for that sort of thing. It's a setting that I kinda hope might spark some inspiration in others to create stories or art that would fit into the same universe.
Posted by Anokesz 7 years ago Report
Well i think you handled the world building in a clever way and gave anyone looking to explore it a number of potential threads to follow. I know it made me curious and envision some of the events.
As for the school stuff with it you managed to set up both your story and the characters well, giving them both clear motivations and hints of further development. Anyway yeah a good read and hungry for more.
Posted by glargicus 7 years ago Report
If you're into conspiracies, (like how some people like to put all the pixar movies into a single universe,) this story could possibly take place a few hundred years after "The Princess and the Peasant"
Posted by MrQuarantine 7 years ago Report
This was a very comprehensive story, very well done. I rather liked the fact that you chose to not feature any vore in this chapter. Instead choosing to focus more on the characters, their relationship, and the world building was a very smart decision imo. Handling the info dump the way you did was very clever and is something I can appreciate greatly as it's an issue struggle with heavily myself. I rather enjoyed the dimensions of personality you gave Billie, to me it added a lot more to her character. I'm glad she wasn't just a stereotypical evil bitch archetype. I think you struck a good balance with her clearly hinting that she's willing to do whatever it takes to get what she wants(ruthlessness), but that there is also a bit more to her than that like when she genuinely felt sorry for Nathan's loss(sympathy), or even the flirty nature tendencies she displayed in the story(tease). All in all, I can't wait to read what happens next.
Posted by glargicus 7 years ago Report
It's a writing style that doesn't appeal to everyone, plenty of people just want something really quick they can read one-handed. (Which is fair enough, each to their own.) But I think I've carved out a very small, but comfortable niche among people who appreciate a more long-form story and whose interests lie close enough to my own.
Posted by theprinceh 7 years ago Report
Great story, looking forward for more of this setting.
Posted by glargicus 7 years ago Report
Thanks for reading! It's a fun setting that I'll likely end up writing other stories in the future.
Posted by TheYounger 7 years ago Report
You just made my day! By the way, where'd you get the thumbnail?
Posted by glargicus 7 years ago Report
Thanks. glad you enjoyed it! The thumbnail I drew myself. Still deciding whether it's good enough to upload on its own.
Posted by Larkspurdiblock 7 years ago Report
This is a neat story so far - I'm always a sucker for vorish worldbuilding, and you did not disappoint, my friend.
Billie and Nathan seem like fun characters so far; I'm excited to see where you go with them.
Posted by glargicus 5 years ago Report
I just realised that I somehow didn't see this comment until now. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the world building, I really wasn't sure if people would like the setting. Hopefully you've enjoyed the new chapter as much as you did this one.