Posted by joshfang96 7 years ago Report

You know, I've imagine that flutters would be eating
by the elder gardening pony for ruined her trap for the animals, buuut anything is a possibility, where if is a small pred or something much worst for her fate and the others, although it's strange there's no elder pony preds in mlp vore stories now days.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

my idea for fluttershy is a micro pred, seeing as i haven't written one yet. But right now it could go a few ways, as i haven't finalised it yet, same for the pinkie one.

i have a few old pred stories planned in the as mentioned bible sized stack of drafts, so give it a little time and i am sure one will crop up as i dig through the pile.

Posted by joshfang96 7 years ago Report

Ah, that would be interesting, weather it's something or someone for pinkie and shy. And as for rarity part, I'm guessing it's obvious what's going to happen to her.>:3

But besides all that, I'll be looking forward for the other three girls and other good alternative stories you've come up with.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

glad your enjoying it, in order of when i will do these gala stories, it will be Shy, Pink, Rara, Twi.

i have many more alt cannon storys in the stack, so be sure to vote when the opertunity presents itself, there will be everything from Chrissy to ostriches, as i have alot on my to do list.

Posted by joshfang96 7 years ago Report

Nice. I'll be sure to keep a look out for that.

Posted by PonyThroat 7 years ago Report

poor aj.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

She died doing what she loved, selling apple related products to get Granny Smith a new hip.

Posted by SleepySleepy 7 years ago Report

Loved the detail, and all the different scenes, but holy shit is that toilet of Giselle's impressive. Most can't handle a pen without clogging, yet hers handles the entirely of a pony's solid skeleton, which even when condensed, is definitely way bigger than a single pen.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

we have a old Victorian toilet in my house, used to be outside but we did a renovation and now its inside, i dont know what the Victorians ate but that toilet can handle all manner of things, i remember my dad cleaned fish once and just tossed the bones in there and flushed back when it was in the shed in the garden. i once lost a mug in it, so i am convinced that it is the best toilet ever made.


the pipes in the back of them were just so much wider, because i assume they didn't want clogs to occur, so they just made them wider and shaped in such a way that if you pack stuff into it it forces its way to the sewers without water.

https://cdn.shopify.com/s/files/1/0410/5409/products/P1030567_1024x1024.JPG?v=1449237811



i assume the toilets in the royal palace would be at least mid Edwardian in style, so more then capable of taking such a load though they might chug.

Posted by takugenji 7 years ago Report

If you do continue it, all I hope for is no Blueblood. Don't know why I don't like him in vore. Don't like him as pred or prey because the storys always turn out the same. It hurts stories way more than helping them.

Maybe some of the main 6 just don't get preyed? or maybe they are the preds. who knows. I don't remember if you've ever done a main 6 pred story.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

i can tell you for a fact that Blueblood is not a pred in the Rarity segment, but i dont want to mention who eats marshmallow pony as no spoilers. as i like your self didnt want to fall into that pitfall, as its one of the oldest pony vore tropes when it comes to the gala.

i have storys planned for each of the mane six, but this series is just the gala getting ruined for them all in a different vorish way. the fluttershy segment is the next one planned, the reason i wrote some different stories is i was having difficulty with the pinkie chapter so did a few other things to try and break the writers block.

now that you mention it i dont think i have done any of the mane six as preds, though its not intentional, i just pick a story from my large stack i feel like writing and doing so, and its just a coincidence one hasnt involved one of them as pred, as i know for a fact a few of them lie in the pile that is my to do list. might have to prioritise a certain twilight sparkle story, to set the balance back in order..

Posted by takugenji 7 years ago Report

Just never really liked Blueblood as pred or prey. don't really care about if it is with Rarity or not. His attitude is just too blah. Honestly I think it would be cool if one of the main 6 just didn't get vored and wondered where all the others went to.

Not really telling you what to do first though of course. I understand different stories had the ideas at the different times.

HOnestly I've never really been much of a fan of Fatal. Much more love for endosoma and full tour. Also don't care for cruel Predators. Specifically when a pred starts talking down prey and talking too much about uncaring feelings. I love it when a pred actually sounds like they have some empathy.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

i have the idea already that there will be a where is everybody sort of moment, as i have a epilogue with spike already written to shove at the end of the last story, as in the show he bugged out pretty early on and went to the donut shop, hence avoiding the same fate as his friends.


When i write i try to not tackle the same themes in rapid succession, so if you look at my body of work so far its all basically unique. reason is to tide off getting board and prevent writers block as i am constantly tackling new ideas. the fact you mentioned it brought it to my attention and i realised it might be fun to do so, so dont feel you pressured me into anything.

because of this i am bound to tackle more themes in the future that will probably tickle your fancy, its just the waiting game, as i have around 2-3 hundred story ideas i could just randomly decide i want to write on a given day.

Posted by takugenji 7 years ago Report

This all takes place in the first time they went to the gala right? so what happens with discord? and tirek... and Chrysalis? It could be a nice little nod to actually bring those characters to ruin the days of the preds. I don't think I've really seen anyone do something like that.

Always in stories it pretty much ends in disposal, (which I've never liked due to its seemingly permanence) stories never go into what happens when the main 6 suddenly just die or go missing.

Also just remembered at work that I was wrong about you not doing a main 6 pred. Rarity ate the doppelganger from that one book. the curious case of charity or something... I have noticed that you do a lot of disposal and then end stories with a "They can never be found now" kind of tone. Don't really know why that is though.

Anyway probably gonna take a little break from vore for maybe a week or something. (death really depresses me and it is everywhere in vore). If you ever want me to give a critique though i'd be glad to.

Posted by doomfister 7 years ago Report

Aye thats right first time they do the gala, the idea is basically what if it turns into a gagglefuck, and they all meet a untimely demise. the concept of repercussions for actions is somthing i am going to play with in my main sort of mlp seres thing i am writing, as in a few chapters i am going to give people the options to vote for stuff, and the choices will have impale, so if Twi gets eaten, then shes dead AF.

for me the disposal is one of my kinks, seeing as its kind of like the ultimate domination, hence its prevalence in my works, as most are stand alones, so they dont have to walk away from the altercation. its like some of the other writers, like the preference for obese mares, or wicked fart play, its just a relection of what they are into.

the never being found thing is only in certain storys, it just depends what your reading of mine. like in this one the griffon is going to brag to all her mates about eating AJ, were as for the rainbow story set in the same universe, they will probebly never know where she got to unless spitfire or soarin have a loose tongue when drunk. it depends on the context of the story, like in my most recent story i wrote it in such a way that the characters had had a bit too much booze, and as such it would make sense as the pred wouldn't even remember eating pinkie pie.



i had forgotten about that Rara story but the moment after typing it i remembered, the reason it slipped my mind was because i had based it on a book and not the show proper.


i would appreciate any feedback, so feel free to critique my work, i cannot improve if i dont know what i am doing wrong.

Posted by takugenji 6 years ago Report

I can give ideas to you of situations and stuff. It is sort of something that I do a lot of, making ideas. However I can't really do any critique work today. Getting home from work is bothersome and has drained me more than I like it to. I don't want to get into too thinky of a mood, ya know (since it is like 11 right now). However if you want to wait till the weekend, I can probably do a few then. So long as the story isn't too strong in the death department.

I usually have to take a few day break after reading anything involving death, unless it isn't really described. Just something about me doesn't really like death in any fetish sense. But 2 or 3 days is all it takes for me to get better.

Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report

feel free to toss ideas at me when you feel up to it, if i like them i will surely add them to the stack in some capacity.

Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report

This one didn't hit the feels as much as the previous one, but I liked how Applejack escaped her first predator, it made for a nice change of pace. Although I would recommend using the Cruel Pred tag because Giselle seems rather cruel here, not showing a lick of remorse or regret unlike Soarin, who actually apologized to Rainbow.

Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report

Also, I just realized this: Why are skulls always smiling?

Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report

because with the flesh melted off they give you a smile, so it gives a little dark humor to the morbidity of death. this should have a cruel pred tag, but it seems someone has removed it, as I seem to have an issue with people tagging my stuff and removing tags.

if you like little twists like that they happen a lot in my work, I like to usurp expectations for normal vore scenarios. this could have been a conventional grab and gulp, but what if an inexperienced pred doesn't know what their actually doing, this would result and if you happen to be at the party with a more confident predator, they would jump in to cover your ass. most stories seem to say the first time vore is great, but if its anything like sex it's mostly just awkward and likely to go wrong if half the stories I have heard down the pub are a good indication.

on a side note, this has an image to go with it that can be found here. https://aryion.com/g4/view/466734

Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report

I see where your coming from, I too like to divert from the norm when it comes to Vore stories. One look at my first story will clearly show you what I mean.

And I just have to ask, what the hell did Applejack put in those applefritters? Because even if this is Natalya's first time eating a pony, she should have known that Applejack would have not been on board with becoming bird fat.

Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report

nothing but love and family values XD. but in seriousness i based Natalya of what are called town girls around where i live. they are basically people who have never been out in the real world, aka the countryside in England and have no idea how things work, only hearing it second hand, resulting in many stories of hillarity.

now imagine yourself in griffonstone, and every one who has eaten a pony brags about it, and says its easy as pie to eat the flat teeth. as if griffons admit they had difficulty bagging their first pony they would get all manner of banter from their peers, and as such would more then likely just say " pfft, it was easy,". as Nat has never left the griffon commonwealth, or what ever they call their country, she has no idea on how to correctly hunt or eat ponies, and as such is depending on the often exaggerated or downplayed reports from her peers.

so to skip on paying a bill, Nat just thinks hey i can eat this pony that's easy enough, if i believe all my friends, all i need to do is have a confidant lunge and a few swallows to bag this little mare. then the reality sets in that if you put any animal to the wall you going to have the flight or fight response, and if your head is down another animals gullet its only the fight option left.

hence she went in to a situation she had greatly miscalculated on, and had to be bailed out by someone who knew what they were doing.

if your a writer i will check out your stuff tomorrow as i always love to see more content, the reason for that is i am just finishing up a story atm.

Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report

And that's why a real hunter would kill the prey before consumption, but where's the fun in that?

Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report

you know it Wrigglers FTW.