I disagree, I actually liked that she died before the cooking. If nothing else it allowed for a swifter process, not having to constantly cut back to the preys perspective, and better treated the prey as Meat.
This was all kinds of great, yo. I really liked how the mom kept toying with the idea that she'd end up cooked someday but ultimately enjoyed her daughter.
The teasing lead up was handled really well as was the butchering. Having the mom wiggling around really helped keep it interesting and exciting.
Posted by Kelly 6 years ago Report
Loved the story the first part was more enjoyable but the ending was lovely
Posted by x9comega 6 years ago Report
I disagree, I actually liked that she died before the cooking. If nothing else it allowed for a swifter process, not having to constantly cut back to the preys perspective, and better treated the prey as Meat.
Posted by BardicLasher 6 years ago Report
...Kiiiinda hope there's a follow up to this.
Posted by Slimshod 6 years ago Report
This was all kinds of great, yo. I really liked how the mom kept toying with the idea that she'd end up cooked someday but ultimately enjoyed her daughter.
The teasing lead up was handled really well as was the butchering. Having the mom wiggling around really helped keep it interesting and exciting.
Posted by Fantasmo 2 years ago Report
Wow, lovely story, I love the twists in the beginning!
The actual butchering was on the fast side, but variations make life sweet...