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This is my contribution to LucifersChef’s “Casual Vore Write-A-Thon”
Link: https://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=54223&p=2713925#p2713925
I wrote this in just a couple of hours and I hope you will leave a comment on it, any sort of constructive critiques are welcome.
There is a vore festival in the city and a young woman who moved away a couple of years ago is back for a visit.
Posted by LucifersChef 6 years ago Report
Great story. M/F isn't my usual jam but you definitely made this interesting and hot!
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Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report
Thanks a lot, I am glad you enjoyed it anyway^^
I hope more people also will contribute to your little Write-A-Thon. Do you have an idea for story perhaps?
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Posted by DrakentheBlack 6 years ago Report
Awesome job! I love cock vore! Short and to the point, but still enjoyable, and I laughed out loud at the final line of the story.
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Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report
I usually try to come up with a funny or twisted end when I write short stories in order to make them somewhat memorable, so thanks, I am happy that at least someone here dared to tell me they laughed of it :)
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Posted by Apex 6 years ago Report
What an ending. I wonder if this is Bruce's little secret or something for him and his GF to laugh about later. A fun read!
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Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report
Thanks for reading it^^ I guess that Bruce at least owe his girlfriend an explanation and who knows, maybe if he is lucky she will want to "see" more of her sister ;)
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Posted by satanhymn666 6 years ago Report
Great work! While there were a few grammatical errors in the story (mainly with spaces being where the shouldn't be), this story was pretty damn sexy, and the twist ending made me laugh. Good job! <3 Saved.
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Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report
Thanks, I am glad you enjoyed the story and the twisted ending^^ When I write I usually have an idea for the end in mind and it is therefore very encouraging to see that people appreciate it :)
(I am terrible sorry about the strange spaces, but those aren't actually my fault! When I upload my documents, this site sometimes mess up with the words and divide them on random. I have tried to fix it but have no real idea how, there are several other authors here with the same problem so if you can figure it out then please tell me.)
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Posted by satanhymn666 6 years ago Report
No problem! And as for the spaces, I had a feeling it was a technical error but I wanted to bring it up just in case if you did it unconsciously or something. lol As for the spaces, I honestly don't know how to fix that. Try saving it as an RTF or something, and uploading it then.
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Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report
Thanks a lot^^ uploading it in RTF worked! For any grammatical errors still left in the story, I will take full responsibility ;)
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Posted by satanhymn666 6 years ago Report
No problem~
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