Posted by MidNightOwlArt 6 years ago Report

Man do you have enough tags? You can literally know everything in the story before you read it.
But whatever i’m sure the story is great .

(Reads story)
Yep it was great ^__^

Posted by Hoboman 6 years ago Report

Thanks! Yeah, now that you mention it, I think I will get rid of a few.

Posted by Apex 6 years ago Report

The first prey got me really excited, I really like how you handled the post-vore and digestion of the second aaaaaaand I felt everything after that kind of got glazed over and left me wanting a bit more. I did like Martin finding a maybe girlfriend because I'm a sucker for romantic stuff, but I honestly can't see that ending in any other way besides one of them getting eaten by the other. Kind of puts a damper on that, but that's more my problem than yours.

So, yeah, the first two preys make the story for me. That's enough for me to give it a thumbs up.

Posted by Hoboman 6 years ago Report

First off, thanks for the feedback! I'm so glad you liked it. I'll be sure to take it into account next time I write. I'm sorry about that part feeling glossed over. At the time I wrote it, I'd felt on a deadline and rushed it a bit. I'll probably go back eventually and add a bit more. To explain things between Martin and Parvati and why neither gulped down the other...

1.They were both just too full after the contest. In my stories people still have limits to how much they can eat.
2. A lot of people in my stories' verse usually don't consider potential romantic partners food, excluding safe vore and full tour. That they didn't try to eat each other right off should be taken as a sign they're serious about one another.
I know this was long, but I hope this clears a few things up.

Posted by VincentShadowScale 6 years ago Report

Now this seems like a fun time

Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report

I usually not one for gass or scat, but the rest of the story was great and you could have lingered a bit more on the Korean girl though, but I really liked the potential relationship between Martin and Parvati^^ It was fun to see that Martin and his mother both were into vore and that he hit of with such a beautiful Indian girl. Happy end :3 ?

It is always interesting to read what others write when they imagine a Write-A-Thon Vore festival :)
(Maybe someone should write a short story about the Latina woman who wasn't so keen on being devoured herself^^)

Posted by Hoboman 6 years ago Report

Nothing more romantic like bonding over eating people, right? Definitely a happy ending all round, except maybe for that poor Latina. I may do a quickie about her, or if you wanted to take a crack at it, be my guest!

Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report

It feels tantalizing writing a short story to explain why the Latina didn't want to be eaten and see if she had a good reason for it or not. But I am also curious to see what you would have thought up... sure you won't mind if I write a short story?

Posted by Hoboman 6 years ago Report

By all means, feel free. I like seeing what others can come up with. How does this sound? We'll both write something up, and then you post yours and I'll put mine down in a blog entry initially so you can see what I came up with.

Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report

Sounds like fun^^ It might take a few days to have mine ready but I will try to write as soon as I can.

Posted by Hoboman 6 years ago Report

Ok! Can't wait to see it.

Posted by Nalzindar 6 years ago Report

Then I have finished the spin off and posted it on my page, I named the story "Covering the Vore Festival".
I hope you will like it.