Posted by Forstand 5 years ago Report

Ooh, new series! (new to me anyway)

Q1: An ancient spider-girl in suspended animation.

Q2: Bring Helena because she's a guardswoman

Q3: He seems pretty strong as is... maybe he can split himself into copies, could be useful in a fight.

Q4: G-Beyond The City. I love stories about the underdark / underground lands - so cool!

Posted by Graywolf18 5 years ago Report

You may not remember this since it's been a while but one of the reasons Kollo isn't perceived as "world ending super monster" is his inability to reproduce. Probably shouldn't change that one.

Posted by Graywolf18 5 years ago Report

OH!, There's actually a section on him splitting into non sentient copies in Question 4-I. That one's on me, sorry.

Posted by Devour 5 years ago Report

I got home and went online and noticed that you had posted this story 7 minutes before and kind of geeked out. This as been such an interesting and great story so far and can't wait to see how it goes from here. I also love how I can be part of crafting the story along with all the other readers that love your work.

For Question 4 I view the priority as:
1. A. He is in the tunnels and Kollo needs to deal with them.
2. H. The spider statue is there and probably deals with the coffin seams to me that they would go together
3. B. C. I am combining the two because as his political influence grows through this power struggle the "monster community" would grow. Though the monster community would take a lot longer to grow
4. E. He made a promise to break out the assassins.
5. F. then G. This needs to happen in this order because others from other cities and countries need to discover that he is really powerful which will affect how he moves forward
6. I. His composition is very interesting but I feel that there is a lot on the plate before more is added on.

Then adding to the harem seems like a much more passive objective to the entire story then an active one. If you are intending of making the growth of the harem be an active story line I would wait until Kollo's life settles down from all the other issues that would come up.


As for the other questions I am going to have to think about those this was just easy for me to answer.

Posted by Devour 5 years ago Report

An amendment! As the War with the Ant-men go on he discovers the "Beyond" portion but doesn't do anything about it yet

Posted by Graywolf18 5 years ago Report

I really wasn't sure about this becoming an interactive since I really liked how it was going beforehand... but this gives me the opportunity to butt in and influence the story with my stupidity. So long as the RNG dice stay out I'm cool with these changes.

Q1: The queen of the precious race inhabiting this grand city. And OF COURSE he should open it! :D More babes to suck on!

Q2: If the Dragon princess isn't busy guarding our new pad than we should bring her. Our new inhuman friends may already be familiar with her. Ask her about he guard schedule and her association with our new political friends before bringing her. Bring up to 3 of the new girls to the surface if they still want out.

Q3: As far as slime powers go I think Kollo is perdy set on that. I can't think of any more to give him that he doesn't already have. Maybe expand his telepathic powers? Mind reading and such. Be good for interrogations. He's already learned how to semi-utilize fairy magic, maybe delve into some more utility spells, he's seen (and eaten) more than a fair share of cool ones.

Q4 Ranked top to bottom in importance.
E. Prison break - F*ck those stupid f*cking guards!
A. War with the antmen - F*ck those stupid f*cking Antment too!
D. Strugle for the coast - Mermaids you say! Count me in.
J. Grow the Harem - These girls need faces. Adorable, delicious faces.
C. Champion of the Inhuman - More monsters = more vore. Yes.
H. Secret of the spider - I'm arachnophobic, but I still want spider people.
Don't care as much about the rest but here's a general touch up finisher. B, I, F, G.

Posted by minasan 5 years ago Report

This is one of my favorite stories so glad to see more of it and I'm happy to provide ideas.

Q1: Given how he's acted to this point I expect him to want to deal with it rather than leave it behind the defenses protecting his women. The obvious choice would be trying to devour it. Less obvious would be just swallowing it and carrying it up to the surface to have specialists analyze. Others have suggested the obvious suspended animation, other ideas like weapons, sealed evil, or just a dead body seem less interesting.

Q2: I don't remember the characters too well, but anyone with political or economic experience is a good idea.

Q3: The only ability that I think he could really benefit from while being in theme would be ability to change his size. Getting bigger and smaller all the time does impose a bit of a limit on him though so maybe that's better left as is.

Q4: I feel like A is set up to be pretty quickly resolved at this rate, but it is something he needs to deal with soonish.

The idea of a mermaid swimming around inside his body is so amusing that I like D.

B and E go together rather nicely so I like those as well.

I feel like B would feed easily into F at some point but that F should probably be pushed back a while.

H I'm just ambivalent to, no investment yet.

G shouldn't be done any time soon. You need to deal with more of the hanging plot threads in the underground before spreading beyond the city underground for G anyway, and I see that level of complexity as difficult to write until after you've wrapped up some of the existing plot threads.

I just seems a little unnecessary, it's magic don't have to explain that.

J honestly he's already over a hundred and there's little distinguishing them now, no need to add even more.

C I don't like too much because I don't think Kollo fits well as standard bearer of any movement. It's just not in his personality. Plus he's not really the photogenic sort needed.

So if I had to rate them in what I want to see:

1. D
2. A
3. E
4. B
5. F
6. H
7. G
8. I
9. J
10. C

Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 5 years ago Report

Kollo low key savage

1) a spider girl on ice

2) any of the new girls who want to see the surface again, at least to let people know they aren't dead

3) can he absorb magic and infuse it with items? I dont remember if it was ever said

4) B, E, C, D, I, A, H, G, J, F
Kollo needs to show those suits in parley that they cant touch his ever growing harem. Also to keep his land and assert dominance over the underworld

Posted by giblieherps 5 years ago Report

I would like to see more in section I. is it possible that kolo can inbue some mana into a part of him and leave behind a portion that is not sentient but is cabable of holding a girl and healing her. i think it ouwld be cool for him to leave behind "hospital beds" or cleaning beds (that could clean girls but would not digest, while staying non-sentient)

thanks for your great writings.