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Chirin, Kimille, and Lumine are just a couple of friends tackling the most popular MMORPG of the twenty second century, Shards of Lucidity!

Only, instead of going on quests or working on their crafts, it seems Kimille and Lumine have come up with a rather peculiar way to cheese the game! Now the harried healer Chirin must endure their most ridiculous scheme yet! Will she make this her group's first successful strat, or will she suffer a humiliating fate?

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Fabhar

Posted by Fabhar 1 month ago Report

I really enjoyed this! I hope you post stuff of similar quality in the future!

VividLucidity

Posted by VividLucidity 1 month ago Report

A nice story. You've got a good writing ability. Keep it up!

MidoriHime

Posted by MidoriHime 1 month ago Report

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it, and I definitely plan to write more in the future!

DHCPMigrant

Posted by DHCPMigrant 1 month ago Report

Jesus fucking Christ. It took my 5 hours to find you. Had downloaded PDF on phone but lost the thread and site name.

Anyway, loved the story. Was more so interested in the premise. You write pretty damn well. Hoping to see more similar stuff in the future.

MidoriHime

Posted by MidoriHime 1 month ago Report

Thanks for the compliments, my next story will be a different concept, but I hope you'll like it once I put it out!

OsmiumOrchid

Posted by OsmiumOrchid 3 weeks ago Report

This was really good! Fun, unique concept, and the execution of it was great. Loved the descriptions of her being packed in with other food, as well as the health updates. I'm a sucker for healthbars in vore, and this is the first time I've seen it done effectively in writing, so good job!

If you're looking for critique, the only issue I picked up on with one read through is during the part where she's struggling against the food being stuffed in with her. You reference the concern of taking drowning damage in essentially the same way really close together. It may just be because 'drowning damage' is a pretty specific phrase, but it stuck out to me while I was reading.

Looking forward to more from you!

MidoriHime

Posted by MidoriHime 3 weeks ago Report

Good point about the drowning damage thing, my bad! I must've glossed over it in editing.

Still, thank you for reading, and I hope you'll stick around to enjoy my future works!