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I have finally finished it. This took waaaaayyyy too long to write. It was really fun to write in the beginning but then It became a hassle when I got worried that it was getting too long. Lost some motivation but I managed to stick it in the end. I wanted to make the latter half more detailed but the word count was getting too large.
This part clocks in at 20k words... yeah... I really hope people read it still. I actually cut a lot of parts out because it was getting too long. I think this is the max length I will ever write a story for the future. To be honest, probably won't come back to this series anytime in the near future, maybe ever. I've been eagerly wanting to work on new ideas so I'm going leave this series in the background for now.
I am REALLY hoping there is some improvement in my writing style in this one. It's a really long story so there might be a mistake here or there, hopefully there is very few. Please don't hesitate to give me feedback and just tell me what you think!
Check the tags if you want an idea of what takes place in the story and enjoy! Cheers!
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Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
Finally anew one
Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
Ur stories are the best ^^
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Thanks for the kind compliment, appreciate it. Hope you enjoy the story.
Posted by Insideurstomach 5 years ago Report
Yooooo I’ve been waiting for this, haven’t even read it yet but I’m legitimately excited.
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Fingers crossed that it delivers!
Posted by Insideurstomach 5 years ago Report
Absolutely did, you knocked it out of the park. I look forward to more from these two but can’t wait to read other stories by you as well. Keep it up!
Posted by kokage 5 years ago Report
This is absolutely stunning. The terrifying yet thrilling atmosphere you've given to this series is really fascinating. I can't wait for what you will bring us next!
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Glad to know that all the extra scenes outside of the vore made an impact. Cheers!
Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report
Extremely good story. I absolutely loved it. Been looking forward to it a lot ever since part two released and it lived up to all expectations.
I'll get you the longer, more in depth feedback you deserve later.
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Awesome! It's a relief to hear that the time I spent was worth it.
I'll be waiting patiently for your feedback.
Posted by ApertureScience 5 years ago Report
There should be no concern about length, the great writing and story telling guarantee that there could never be enough, these really are well written. Like genuinely good stories beyond vore
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
I guess looking at the length now it seems fine. Back when I was writing the story it looked far too long.
Thank you for the kind compliments, it's nice to know people enjoy the story too, not just the vore. I personally find that additional story makes the vore even better!
Posted by Hozomat 5 years ago Report
Well that was a loooot of build up! I actually took a break just before the vore part ^^
Anyway, the whole Secret lab plot was a good way to explain how the crimes were hidden, and that reveal on the enzyme was interesting... More giantess to come? :p
As for the vore, oh boy. 4 preys?? I'm actually confused because I thought Emma already had trouble containing just one prey (she felt full with Jessie alone), so 4 plus a full meal? Apart from that detail, Trey's Swallowing was teasing and creative (having his head outside at the last moment), the tug of War was a fantastic idea, having Sandra pulled into the mouth... And Finn's descent was a tad... Slow to my taste.
Apart from that, I like the fact that the preys all died one by one inside Emma, it was a nice touch. I just wish there were more explicit interaction between Jack and Emma, playing with the stomach, or even something lewder!...
But you've done a great job, and mostly a long one! Congrats!
Now I'm curious about your new stories with new contexts :)
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
In hindsight, shouldn't have put the enzyme part in... I put it in to support Dr.Wakeman's ridiculous experiment and to help setup the next part. (I have an idea for the next part but who knows when that will come out.)
YEAAAAHHHHH, I had some people point out from the last two stories that Jessie could in no capacity actually fill up Emma. Some people on this site know quite a lot about the limits of the human stomach lol. I guess that's an inconsistency we're all just going to have to ignore... :(
Yeah, Finn's part is a bit slow but it felt wrong to let him go too quick.
"I just wish there were more explicit interaction between Jack and Emma, playing with the stomach, or even something lewder!"
- Yeah maybe there should have been. I guess some things are just best left to the imagination. :)
Thanks again, hopefully the next story is even better. Cheers!
Posted by Altimos 5 years ago Report
I dare say, that was a mighty fine read.
I was wondering what the next part was going to be... you did NOT disappoint.
"Waaaaayyy too long to write..." you say? Nonsense, I think it took exactly the right amount of time, as it allowed you to put together this really splendid continuation.
Don't worry, 20k aint too much, it's just enough <3
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Thank you thank you. Yeah I wanted to get it out a week ago but I guess better late than never. Maybe 20k isnt too much... maybe I was just fatigued from never writing anything in my life that was that long.
Cheers!
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Thanks! Yeah, I should seriously consider getting someone else to proof read my stories... i don't know why I'm so stubborn about it.
Hope to get one out in the near future!
Posted by kokeman 5 years ago Report
That was an amazing story for sure, a great conclusion for the stories, yeah
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Awesome! Cheers!
Posted by Himmi99 5 years ago Report
You outdone yourself here ! What an amazing story with twists & turn. This nearly made me tear up. From everything you done connecting stories & characters & the detail you put in was amazing. Most stories nowadays don't have any of that anymore. I had some expectations on both the 2. & 3. story of this & you exceeded both of them so much ! Thank you for this piece of art.
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
"piece of art" I don't know about that lol. I do really appreciate your comment tho, I think I did a good job with story considering I never planned to continue after part 1. And yeah I wish there were more story driven macro/micro stories on the site... but oh well... to each their own.
Posted by nineplay 5 years ago Report
(hey uhh for anyone who likes to read the comments first (???) I go through a lot of spoilers here so you should probably just read the actual story beforehand lol)
What an incredible finale to a consistently impressive trilogy.
Let's start overall. I can't understate how much I appreciate when authors go the extra mile to craft an engaging context around the, uh..."reason(s) we're all reading." And this...hoo boy. Multiple times throughout, I took a break just to acknowledge that I was legitimately invested in these characters, predicting what would happen next, and where their arcs would end.
There's a *really* cool parallel going on in this chapter specifically, wherein both Dr. Wakeman and Emma+Jack each have their own morally questionable and/or reprehensible motives to be complicit in allowing for the same acts to occur. Both parties are given similar audiences, watching on in horror (and a few among them in morbid curiosity) knowing they are pretty much unable to intervene. Loving these dynamics.
The entire story up to the game with Finn was so enjoyable to see unfold, as the secondary plot threads from the first two chapters began to converge, and the major question of the story became clear: is there a limit to what Jack can tolerate, or will he double-down definitively? I like that Jack is too far gone right when Finn offers him his most concrete out; it made me think that had that option been presented before, had they been able to plan for longer before Emma started eating, Jack might have taken the deal full stop. Buuuut since he had to buy time, further letting himself give in in the process...there was no hope for Finn when push came to shove, er, swallow.
Moving forward into some specifics (I could really go on and on about every section here but I also don't want to forget the highlights or end up gushing redundant): I feel like I have seen more than a few tug-of-war micro scenes and this is perhaps the most well-done. The twists are amusing even in already knowing it can't end well for anyone involved. When Jack and Finn agreed upon hide-and-seek I kinda was looking forward to see how you'd ace that scenario too lol.
Also the payoff to all the sexual tension between Emma and Jack was pretty fuckin sweet to see and a nice end on the 3-part spiraling ride towards "fuck it what's done is done and we're absolutely made for each other."
And the extra spotlight on Emma's stomach and its sounds and its interior and her BURPS hELLO now this is what I longed for!!!
In fact Emma is so wonderfully playful and somehow likable as a whole that it hurts how much me periodically wishing to experience her from Jack's perspective is also morally compromising lmao. I adore the way her character is written. You can feel how into the whole thing she is but instead of that being her entire character she exudes a palpable personality that is also befitting of an innocent yet cruel giantess. That's been true throughout but it really shined here.
And Jack was at some of his best here too for that matter. Do you realize how easy it is to abuse the "MC shares the fetishes of the expected reader" trope? I'm sure you do. And yet here I am going "me." after all of his lines. As a joke. I think. Is this what you wanted? :3
Why did I write a review this long? Is it possible to have this many immediate thoughts about a fucking vore story? What about criticism? There's some duplicate words and other proofreading errors and the first half/"the sections before Finn is the last one left" feel a notch more descriptive and involved than the remaining parts. What else can I say? What else do you want? You have grabbed my attention and fed it to Emma yourself. My metaphysical form awaits your next story.
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
I can't understate how much I appreciate it when people go out of their way to leave detailed responses to my stories. Thank you very very much. It helps me understand what was good and what was bad so that I know how to mold future stories!
It's great to hear that you and many others seem to be very interested in the story aspect of my stories; I will definitely make sure that future stories retain those elements. I may have mentioned above, but I love it when authors try creating characters we care about. (and/or are interested in) I think it adds a lot to stories that exist primarily due to a fetish.
If I knew people were ok with the length, (It felt really long at the time of writing. In hindsight, its not as long as I thought) I would have added more detail to the second half of the story. I felt like it was wasn't doing a good job really helping the reader feel or see what was going on. Oh well, I guess its something to work on.
Burps were a cute touch (added those cause you mentioned them last time lol). Think I gotta work on those a bit more.
Interesting to hear that you find Emma likable! I was worried that she was too much of an non-remorseful crazed killer to be even remotely likable. BUUUUTTT I guess shes hot and does what a lot of us readers want her to do... so I guess she gets away with it.
"And yet here I am going "me." after all of his lines. As a joke. I think. Is this what you wanted? :3" ;)
You wrote a review this long so I have a better idea of what people think of my work, thank you. I guess so. Always ready to be torn apart and criticized if its constructive! ...won't learn to write better if people only say good things! I am such a stubborn fuck, I don't know why I don't get anyone to proof read... I promise I will trrrryyyy ask somebody for next time. You can say whatever more you want. I want you to be around for my next story (Also eagerly waiting for your new stories!)
Cheers!
Posted by Datboodie 5 years ago Report
Fantastic, every word was worth it. Not only hot as fuck but engaging and genuinely entertaining. Can't wait for more of your stuff!
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Glad you enjoyed it! See you around when the next one drops!
Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
I finally got around to reading ive been so busy since its long and i wanted to read it all at once so i was waiting for a perfect day i love it its amazing i get the feeling the next stories gonna be about jack and the enzyme he mentioned alot he wanted to be her size
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Glad to see that you like it Adder, I know you've been eagerly waiting for it.
Interesting idea you have for the next part... it's not what I had in mind but it sounds like a fun idea.
Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
Only time can tell right ^^ i plan to write my isn little story about neptunia but with my own twust it womt be vore or giantess but if ur interested ill link u it when its done ^^
Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report
Ah, no vore or giantess :( Oh well. Yeah sure, link it over when you're done!
Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
Its more of an anime manga im writing you know makingafan made story of ur favourite anime
Besudesi dont think im good enough to write vore ill leave that to the professionals like u ????
Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report
Oof why duid my wink turn to ????
Posted by vortexx 5 years ago Report
I love emma!no end to his hunger a real black hole :) here is some proposal of scenes to put for your next chapter: a scene where she swallows thirty people (why not prisoners?) to show the endless limits of his stomach;) a scene with a telephone ringing in his belly then recovered through his poop as in jurassic park 3 with the spinosaur! and finally a happy ending scene with emma pregnant with jack;)
Posted by Luxio512 2 years ago Report
His?
Emma is clearly a girl.
Posted by TinyHunter 4 years ago Report
Love this series, they remind me a bit of the old Observer stories. Can't wait for the next installment!
Also I've gotta say, Emma is at her best when she's being catty and taunting her female prey. The parts where she singles out Sandra during the whole ordeal are the best moments. Does she get some kind of Mean Girls thrill out of eating other girls?
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Ah thank you thank you. I loved the older Observer macro/micro stories. Really wished he still did writing :( I am working on the next installment but I must admit its going rather slow, I'm quite unhappy with my writing and I'm trying to improve it.
And yes, I also do love Emma's behavior around other her soon-to-be prey. Does she get a Mean Girls trill? I don't know... you'll have to ask her >:)
Thanks again!