Posted by Randomness 4 years ago Report

What a brilliant premise. I'm envious of not only the quality, but that this is such an obviously amazing scenario and not ONCE did I ever think of it!

Touche. You are keeping me sharp

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Posted by ObsidianSnake 4 years ago Report

Thanks, and I'm glad it hooked you, even though I know it's going a bit afield.

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Posted by Tahg 4 years ago Report

The story made sense to me, but I've had a bit of a background in the Hunting series. As these stories cover quite a wide range of locations and stories, the issue of finality of prey, or I suppose less common, predators comes up.
Was regen something that was available in Riot's stories because she lived in a more modern time, or because that was a habitat and not typical of the world?

Regarding this story specifically, the setting seems clear enough, but again I have some background on the universe. The description is a bit ambiguous though. I read it as "Emotional" and "Fatal, but hopeful ending" whereas I guess it's "Emotional and fatal" with a "hopeful ending". (To clarify, there is nothing fatal about the outer story or the ending, only the flashback story.) TBH, at least in my opinion fatal is the "expected" outcome on Eka's and probably something I'd reserve in the description for a MC, if at all.




Perhaps it might be nice to have a "fact sheet" about Eanli and Gardenia if you want (case in point, I think they are in different universes but I'm not sure?), that offers some basic info about the worlds, the predator/prey relationship, and locations and era's of your stories.

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Posted by Tahg 4 years ago Report

Ok, note to self: don't put anything in square brackets on this site. The software gobbles it up. The blank area contained a note stating that most of the last paragraph was answered in your gallery description, but I left it in anyway.

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Posted by ObsidianSnake 4 years ago Report

This is fantastic feedback, thank you.

I have indeed been thinking about putting together a reader's guide for the Eanli Cosmos, although I was hoping that I could provide exactly enough context within any given work to ground the reader. There is a history, a timeline, that I'm utilizing. To make matters worse, there's whole continents and societies on Eanli that are highly distinct from one another in terms of geography, society, and also population. For instance: On the continent of Verria, where We Wretched Creatures, Close Only One, Watercolors, and You Do It In The Desert take place there. Prey have a LOT of power in Verria, because they established the cities, so a complicated social contract emerged to keep everyone playing nice. The predators didn't quite ever win there, although as Eanli culture advances and enmeshes, prey in Verria note their sway slipping. Thus, even within this one place, different points in time will have differences in dynamics.

Refabrication is the product of a long series of bio-medical advances, and is a hall-mark of the 'cyberpunk' and 'science fiction' eras. The scene at Eldis Agricultural Machines would have been year 322. The very first successful refabrication was in year 461.

Gardenia is the name the Eanlian researchers bestowed upon the planet Earth after it was discovered in another dimension. Even after they understood that it had existing names, they preferred 'Gardenia', so they decided that it would be the proper name from then on. Eanli and Gardenia are in different dimensions from one another, with Gardenia placed at a nadir-level of minimal "energy", where the Eanlians were shocked to find stable matter that isn't quarks and other sub-atomic particles.

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