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A young witch is preparing for her entrance exam to a prestigious academy, but a final test of soul magic is giving her some trouble. Maybe one of her fellow trainees could provide the boost she's looking for.
Obligatory all characters are 18+
Hey! Did you know I post blogs where you can pitch ideas and support for potential upcoming one-offs like this? This particular story was one of those ideas, but you may want to check it out to see what else is in the works and comment with what you'd like to see next. Everything I pop up there is something I definitely want to write, but there's never enough time. The next idea list should only be a week or so out, as I'd like to get a couple more chapter's of Anna's story out first.
You ever sit down to write out a rough draft of something, and then next thing you know you've written almost 7000 words and entire entire day and half is gone. Yeah, so that happened. I had way too much fun writing this one. Probably spent a little too long on the buildup, but as you may have noticed I like exploring character motivations and conflicts. Grab and gulp stories are great, but I can't help but want some plot in my own work.
Also damn, this was supposed to be out on 8/8, but this thing kind of ran away from me. Oh well.
Also also don't mind if formatting is a bit weird. I'm messing with margins and spacing to try and get my stuff to look a bit better with this site's display.
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Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Awesome story! I thoroughly enjoyed it throughout; I really like how you went the extra mile to write a section post-vore with Hemlock. It adds just that little extra touch to round off the narrative nice and snug. Also, the story is very well written, really easy to understand which is a great bonus. I could go into detailed feedback/criticism if you like (just message me or something), rather not write an essay in the comments section.
I'm disappointed at myself for not finding your stories earlier! I love finding writers that have similar tastes in content and put effort into developing motivations, conflicts, settings, etc. It's something I try my best to work into my stories too. Personally, I find grab and gulp stories rather boring... but maybe I'm just too picky! (Also love how you made the prey that 'possible to swallow' size but also a bit tricky to get down. Gotta let the pred and prey intimately feel each other!)
Anyway... awesome story, hope to see more from you in the future! I'll make sure to check out your other stories soon.
Cheers.
Posted by thecheese01 4 years ago Report
Thanks for the feedback! I've come to realize the context around a vore story is kind of like a narrative foreplay and aftercare for the juicy goodness in the middle. It just makes the whole package that much more pleasant.
I've only been posting on here for a little over a week, so I'm not too surprised you haven't found my work before. My main project is a college series that takes up most of my writing time, but I'm also aiming to write fun little one-offs like this at least once a month.
I'll definitely hit you up with a pm though. I'm still pretty damn new to writing fetish stuff, so I'm kinda winging it with these stories.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 4 years ago Report
Very good. Would have liked one last section from luci's perspective but hard digesting isn't for all.
I'm also imagining a similar story but with the twist ending that the impossible task was a test to weed out those that would turn to killing as a solution and then are in turn devoured themselves. Or have the souls switch places if the victim would not have sunken to such depravity. Your resolution is pretty nice too though!
Posted by thecheese01 4 years ago Report
Hey, thanks!
I'm not particularly opposed to hard digestion if it's thematically fitting, but in the case of this story I was primarily focusing Nissa's perspective and, uh, "character growth". The original outline and most of the first draft didn't actually have Luciana's perspective at all, until I realized the whole duel and Nissa's inevitable betrayal would be a lot more fun to experience from the perspective of the unsuspecting victim. The internal scene was really just a personal indulgence at that point, since I'd already used Luciana as a PoV character anyways.
I kind of wanted the darkness of the overall world and story to gradually dawn on the reader as time progressed. Like how Luciana seems fairly reluctant but ultimately accepting of her fate, and you (probably) think "Oh, I guess this really isn't that bad for her." Then Nissa casually drops that she used a suggestion spell, and an unaltered Luciana would probably have been screaming and thrashing in terror the whole way.
The double twist ending is a fun idea, and I honestly might mess around with something like that eventually, but at least for this story I liked the idea that this school is just totally fine with allowing a solid quarter of its applicants to be horribly killed. Better yet, Nissa really doesn't seem all that bothered anymore. In retrospect, this thing kind of reads as a villain's origin story, and I may come back to these characters at some point if an idea strikes me.