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THIS ISN'T FROM ME! It is a gift that I am posting!
There are a handful of people who wish I was back in action, and I want to take this chance to thank you all for not losing patience with me.
Some people, though, like *REDACTED*, take it above and beyond, and write a 28k words story over several months that is especially tailored to be "Agora's dream story" by literally interviewing me with about a hundred questions about my personality and preferences and using that knowledge to come up with my personal hottest scenarios and pred : D
The result is a pretty interesting experiment that is definitely worth posting for posterity.
Do you guys think it feels like my dream story? :3
P.S. Don't count me out yet, I definitely don't feel like I'm out of the game yet and count on returning!
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Posted by Bleahboy 4 years ago Report
If Chris Hansen were here, she would eat him. Thank god for that.
Posted by Jakar 4 years ago Report
Oh, suppose I could just do this and cut out the middle-man. This was fantastic! Your crowning jewel! If Agora doesn't know then it falls to you to tell me...I plead of you... Will there be a part 2? Or dare I wish - a part 3, 4? I'd be thrilled for any level of prolongation. This was great! I think the merits of this story beg for a conclusion on their own but just in-case that's not enough, I will beg for them. C'moooooon...ya gotta. x)
Posted by Agora 4 years ago Report
It does feel like cutting the story short so it ends up being released instead of in limbo for eternity ended up making it annoyingly cliffhangery! Things just end so fast!
Not going to make any promises on continuing this myself tho, but the thought is certainly amusing X)
Posted by Belly97 4 years ago Report
It would be incredible (but also probably impossible) if you could write both the fatal and non-fatal. I personally lean towards the non-fatal but still with the full experience (Either regurgitation or him somehow making it the whole way through.....magic right?)
Posted by Belly97 4 years ago Report
Well then a non-fatal follow up with him getting to experience everything, and I do mean everything, but still surviving would be awesome.
Posted by Jakar 4 years ago Report
Do we feel like this is your dream story? I don't know you so I can't say for sure. What I can conclude for certain is that this is close to being my own dream story - or as close as it coming to fruition as I have ever seen. Wow.
What I can gather about you though is that you a cruel person. You are without empathy. How could you not think to confirm or deny whether there would be a continuation of this story after leaving it on that cliffhanger?
...*sigh* Perhaps it was an oversight...and I suppose since you are not the writer it would be presumptuous of you to make any claims about that so I forgive you... But I'd still REALLY like to know the answer if possible.
That said, I would like to bring up one criticism I hope is valid and not merely me interjecting my own preferrences onto it. I wasn't a fan of and it nearly broke my suspension of disbelief when it got to the part about the tinies being worshippers of her for some reason. It seemed to clash with the grounded realism of the rest of the story. And yes, I realize for any vore story you have to be flexible with that kind of thing but compared to the explanations given to all the other aspects that went into this story, this one simply dismissed giving a reason for it.
While other things like how exactly she got ahold of this candy that could shrink people was similarly dismissed, it was touched on and used as part of the buildup enough to where it felt like it was consistent with the internal logic that went into this fantasy. Her suddenly having tiny worshippers felt jarring is all I'm trying to say.
I'm actually saying this as someone who would lose interest in the story if it went too far into the Goddess/worshipper dynamic. I don't think it really added anything to it. I find while it's fun to act those roles in domme/sub play that if I'm following it along in vore literature then it removes too much agency from the prey character. Even if the situation they're in, the predator they're up against leaves them no physical agency, if they mentally submit themselves to that degree then there's no internal struggle. When I'm trying to self insert myself into the story, imagining that inner turmoil going through the prey's head is a big part of it for me, even in willing scenarios. (which as you might presume, I'm a lesser fan of in general)
Okay last paragraph was definitely just opinion... But what I'm saying is if there is indeed a part two and she brings out more worshippers, she should probably take some time to explain it or go deeper with it. (Though I would hate that route personally. xD)
For the rest if I wanted to change this into my perfect story, I would have to alter very little. I'm tempted to go into every little detail about what I loved about this just to contrast my one criticism but I don't find that as interesting to discuss. Just know that I thought this was absouletly amazing and incase ChibiToy doesn't read this, let them know that I think their work is amazing and that this is their crowning jewel! Thankyou also for helping to come up with this amazing scenario and all the ideas that went into it.
Posted by Agora 4 years ago Report
As a fellow reader, I do agree that there was something a little... "easy" about there being convenient tiny worshipers in a closet somewhere XD
I personally dismissed it with a smile since I knew Chibitoy was including that part because he knew I'm a big fan of feeding preys to a pred, so the "how" and "why" took a backseat while I enjoyed the show.
We both thank you for this comment in any case, so much attention given to a comment is a rare sight and makes any writer's day!
Posted by Jakar 4 years ago Report
Yeah, I'm actually a bit of a writer myself - though not vore as yet - and I'm actually working on being more permissive of plot conveniences in regard to the flow of the pacing. Explaining every little thing can easily turn into over-explanation...and when it's done too much at pivitol moments in the story it can slow everything down a notch and fizzle out the passion.
So while I understood why the timing was probably off to get into it in the heat of that moment I was still unsure why it took that path instead of what seemed more in line with the setting and just having them be willing preys.
I mean, there's every indication that this is how she gets her prey. She has the girl-scout setup that's elaborate enough - what with the custom wrappers an' all - to hint that this is a way for girls to single out potential targets. She is seductive and forward about it beyond her age which makes more sense if it's a perfomance she's learned to put on to get either get her snacks alone or potentially find some willing treats.
And I just personally think that it would've led to more interesting interactions during the feeding. As it stands the vore scene felt only a little different than the restaurant. The tinies were almost as inanimate. (Btw, I'd like to book a reservation at Cunny's Corner, sounds delish)
Ah, there I go with the opinions again. My main point was the direction of them just being willing would've felt like more of a natural progression and might've enhanced those scenes.
Still possibly more favourite vore story ever despite that though! I'd need a little time to dwell on it but I'm pretty sure...
It's actually rare for me to comment in the first place but this thoroughly deserved it. Again, thankyou both for making this happen. Even if it does have to end here I'll still be hoping and looking forward similar works from either of you in the future. :)
Posted by WafflesBear 4 years ago Report
Dang, that was one HECK of a story! Instant fave
Posted by Agora 4 years ago Report
Right? Dude deserves more praise than I ever did. Hope this gives him some new Watches : D
Posted by lllll1337 4 years ago Report
I almost had a heart attack when I saw this in my sub box. Excellent work by Chibi.
Posted by Agora 4 years ago Report
lllll1337 my man, I still love you and I keep stacking up all your stories in my Messages list until I stop being a bitch and read them!
Posted by SupremeToadLord 4 years ago Report
Dear lord, that story length... & here I thought I consistently wrote lengthy pieces - bah! Well, I'm not sure what I can say that hasn't already been said - this is a simply stellar gift & extremely fun to read from start to finish!
That's a naughty little tease at the end there, poking at a possible sequel from such a blatant cliffhanger, heheh~ x3
Posted by Agora 4 years ago Report
I know right? Now imagine having to proofread Chibi's stories. Perhaps not having to do it for this story was the best gift of all? XD
I hope he doesn't read this.
Posted by SupremeToadLord 4 years ago Report
Many hours spent doing so but I'm sure it'd be worth it! :3
Posted by Bleahboy 2 years ago Report
I'm probably late to this but wtf happened to Chibi?
Posted by Agora 2 years ago Report
Sorry, barely log on here anymore, but I'm as clueless as you are!
He basically dropped out of the community as far as I know at some point, never heard from 'em since!