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A skeptical goth girl entertains a spooky ghost story as told by her sunny, blonde childhood friend. The tale speaks of Echo House....and a sinister whistling presence living beneath it.
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Posted by theheadsn 4 years ago Report
did you come up with that back story idea or was that borrowed from something else? That was a SOLID scary story
Posted by Narrows 4 years ago Report
It was made up for the story - though the monster was inspired a bit by John Carpenter's 'The Thing'.
-Winston
Posted by cerealkillerx 4 years ago Report
Bravo! I must say this is probably one of your best works yet, and I have never read anything with such frenzied intensity. The impending sense of doom is overwhelmingly palpable as our poor goth girl Lorrie meets a gruesome fate worse than death. It’s the perfect Halloween tale and I do love reading well-crafted eldritch horror to keep me up at night. I think even H.P. Lovecraft and John Carpenter would be proud of this story! It was truly downright scary!
Posted by Narrows 4 years ago Report
Thanks! I've always enjoyed preds that embody a sense of the surreal, dark and otherworldly. Thanks again for the kind words, it's a huge encouragement!
-Winston
Posted by cerealkillerx 4 years ago Report
Anytime dude! The story is a masterclass example of white-knuckle tension and you definitely subverted my expectations with the ending. I am fondly reminded of the infamous blood test scene from the Thing where an assimilated Palmer attempts to ingest one of the group members, which I can tell was the main inspiration for the insidious creature that resides beneath the rotted floorboards of Echo Manner.
Posted by AlphaSaban 4 years ago Report
Man, what an awesome way to kick off spooky season! I've always loved the idea of a predator imitating those it's consumed and using its new identity to trick the next victim. I wonder how many times it could pull that off before someone started to notice, haha
Stellar work, one of your best!
Posted by gonzodingo 3 years ago Report
This is a fantastic story!
Posted by Narrows 3 years ago Report
Thank you! It was a fun one for sure.