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Beer Batter By VorishHorish -- Report

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After happy hour in a bar, a person who wants to cause mischief gets a little more than they bargained for, after visiting a closed zoo.

I really liked this story personally, I hope you can enjoy it. Please tell me by either making a comment or Pm what you thought of the story. I am trying to improve my skills as a writer.

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wolfSnack

Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report

I'd always love to see more detail, but I love the overall mood of this :) Especially the end, the way you include casual degradation of getting tossed in a bag of wolf shit like any other meal's remains.

You definitely get a favorite from me! I'd love to give writing advice if you're interested (I am also a writer, you can check out the type of details I prefer in my stories on my page).

wolfSnack

Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report

(Also, more feral preds / human prey with disposal is always a good thing! Doubly so when they're canids.)

VorishHorish

Posted by VorishHorish 4 years ago Report

About the thing you said above, I absolutely agree. I don’t think there is enough of Feral preds with human prey. And it such a shame because it’s my personal favorite.

wolfSnack

Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report

Have you seen this story I wrote? https://aryion.com/g4/view/611702

It's another with feral preds! And I know  scalebreath is in the middle of another, set in the Graduation universe :3

VorishHorish

Posted by VorishHorish 4 years ago Report

I’ve read that story before and loved it. I forgot about it for some time until I just read through again. It’s great, I wish more people wrote about feral preds. I find them so much better than anthros.

VorishHorish

Posted by VorishHorish 4 years ago Report

Thank you so much! I’ll check out some of your work to see what details I can add. If that’s ok with you.

wolfSnack

Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report

Yeah, definitely! Feel free, I hope you like my work :)

anyonarex

Posted by anyonarex 4 years ago Report

not bad, could do with more details, and make sure to space the paragraphs out. But overall I liked it. X3

VorishHorish

Posted by VorishHorish 4 years ago Report

Thank you. I’m usually away from my computer, so I write most of it on my phone before I edit it on my computer. I’m gonna increase the indent more so it’s more narrow, and put 2 spaces between the paragraphs so it becomes more readable. I’m not sure how it formats it atm but I think I’m starting to get it.

anyonarex

Posted by anyonarex 4 years ago Report

I usually save it as a .doc file, 1.5 line spacing and about size 14 text. that seems to be the best way to format on Eka's for readability. Some people use PDFs as well.

wolfSnack

Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report

I've used PDFs and it preserves the formatting, but a lot of people come back to me and tell me that it's not very readable on mobile. Since a lot of people are in bed in the dark while reading these, I want a format which is readable on mobile and laptop -- just make sure you use .doc and NOT .docx ;)

anyonarex

Posted by anyonarex 4 years ago Report

yeah PDFs are only really useful if you know the audience will download and open them in different software, and that's never guaranteed lol. Better to just stick with Doc and not docx, docx used to work here but around 2015/2016 it stopped formatting properly and hasn't been fixed.