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Tags: - Annoyed Prey Demi-Human Endosoma F/F Female Pred Female Prey Lamia Liminal Pred Monster girl murder Naga Naga girl Naga Pred Oral Vore Pregnancy pregnant prey pregnant with child Protective Pred Same Size Snake Woman Pred story heavy swamp teasing this is a test story Time Skip toying with prey Unwilling Prey Unwilling to Willing prey Willing prey
okay this story is very much a test for me. Not very vorey, more focused on fluff, characters and descriptors so feed back is appreciated.
Side note I did not know female naga were called Nagis. The more you know.
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Posted by wardog34 4 years ago Report
i would love another part to this story i love the story
Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report
Honestly I had originally planned this to be far longer but just kept getting writers block so I thought I'd upload this and see about feedback
Posted by ExistentialRowlet 4 years ago Report
"protag syndrome"
i see what you did there ;)
Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report
I was very proud of that joke. It's simple but it's one of my favorite that I've written.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 4 years ago Report
Oh no, the dreaded protag syndrom. It wont be long before she shows symptoms of plotis armoris. Lovely fluff with a side of justice is always a win in my book.
Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report
glad to hear that. I really debated posting this on here since it had so little vore
Posted by Tahg 4 years ago Report
Certainly wouldn't mind more to this story, if you ever come up with something. Technically not Non-Fatal, but considering the husband was such a jerk, I don't really mind.
Regarding the Time Skip: You have a large break pretty much in the middle of the scene of Ire leaving, and then after "With luck, she would never again set eyes on that snake woman." you pretty much have nothing. That confused me for a bit until I got a fair bit further in the story.
Naga is not technically wrong as it's sanskrit for serpent, regardless of species. Different from English, where the female tends to take on the species name. Also different from Latin, where an 'i'/'is' ending would indicate a male, and an 'a' ending would indicate female.
Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report
okay, ya the time skip was one part where I wasn't entirely sure how to handle it since I wanted it to seem like a little time had passed only for Nee'var to learn it had been so long, but I'll admit I find time skips difficult at the moment.
Also I was not aware of that. I looked up naga and found a site called Britannica which went into a lot of stuff about them and the name nagis or naginis for female naga was one of the things it talked about.
Glad you liked it and I went with the non fatal tagg more in regards to the vore element, I do include the tag murder so I think it balances out