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A sad dinner guest (new) By nervousvampire -- Report

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Since so many people found the second person perspective hard to read (as well as finding the ending sad) on top of a request if I could redoing the story so here it is. It's longer as a result of the new perspective

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doomed

Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report

I love the story dude . While it is a bit depressing , it works . Though I am surprised you didn’t have cookie end up as some form of sentient fat , or live on inside the preds mind

nervousvampire

Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report

I thought just straight digestion worked better though I had meant to imply sentient fat but just forgot.
As for the depressing nature that to me tells me that I did a good job with it since I wanted it to be tragic. Though now there the alternate ending version for a happier ending