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In a world where some people are as tiny as the borrowers or fairies, how would a relationship/sex work between a tiny and a regular human?
I may write more with these too if I have other inspiration.
Posted by Nomboy 2 days ago Report
Some pointers, not to be rude or mean, just to help you improve on your next story:
You flip between the male character being first person and second person, I and you.
Re-reading it before you post could catch the misplaced extra spaces in the middle of words and before punctuation, and missed letters.
Occasionally you use the wrong word, such as Imaging or scram instead of Imagine and scream. Editing could help catch these as well.
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Posted by TheDarkTraveler 2 days ago Report
Thanks for your tips. I do sometimes switch between first and secons person, it is someting I am trying to get use to and avoice in this case it was due to writing some of this very late at night and editing it to fit with how the rest of the story turned out. the spacing is just a formatting issue with the upload. The spellings is due to dyslexia and I do try to reread my stuff but don't alway pick up on my own mistakes. I hoped you liked my story regardless
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Posted by Nomboy 2 days ago Report
I'm always down for a good tiny story.
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Posted by TheDarkTraveler 2 days ago Report
thanks, but you will have to deal with a mediocre one for now
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Posted by SureLookit101 2 days ago Report
Great stuff, I loved it. Would like to learn more about their relationship and this world.
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Posted by TheDarkTraveler 2 days ago Report
I may write more
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Posted by bartek21 2 days ago Report
wow cool.
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Posted by TheDarkTraveler 2 days ago Report
thanks
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