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As you can probably tell I'm really into Unbirth lately and this story (hopefully series) was inspired by notabots previous works hope you enjoy
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Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report
so her solution to their troubles is kidnapping and a variety of other crimes that would get her life in prison. as well as completely ruining the lives of all those girls. instead of doing the logical thing of getting rid of the problem people in their lives . bru
Posted by elliotalien08 3 years ago Report
Yup pretty much, at least it feels great. Though i am trying to do a more wholesome story though im stuck on if it should be to get the prey a better life or to give someone else a better life by making the problem prey
Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report
if you wanna do a wholesome story. make the pred answer this question ; is the solution actually going to help the prey, or is this really just selfish?
this lady , is just selfish and used the fact that they were in bad situations as justification for ruining their lives. her actions did not better anyone else's life other than her own it is not betterment if you completely erase their life.
now if she had offered them the chance rather then forced it. cleo would've accepted . which would've bettered her life. she could have taught flora how to unbirth. for the others she could've unbirthed their aggressors.
rosa is kinda an addict .
Posted by elliotalien08 3 years ago Report
Hmmm thats an interesting point i do enjoy the twisted reasoning but maybe ill try that when i commission another story
Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report
twisted reasoning is great but it doesnt always carry over the wholesomeness. in stories with twisted reasoning don't make the victim more sympathetic then the main character. otherwise it looks more twisted .
Posted by elliotalien08 3 years ago Report
Ok thank you for your help, when it comes time for the story i don't suppose i could ask your opinion beforehand?
Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report
Dude ill gladly listen. these stories are great.
Posted by elliotalien08 3 years ago Report
Thank you :)
Posted by Restrogenic 3 years ago Report
Great story, thoroughly enjoyed!
Just how exactly is this bettering their lives tho? A lack thereof is not evidence of improvement
Posted by elliotalien08 3 years ago Report
In her eyes being constantly loved by her is better than running around with others who don't care
Posted by Bearwolf324 1 year ago Report
Is there no continuation of this story?
Posted by elliotalien08 1 year ago Report
No, this one was a stand alone story