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First story about my newest OC, Marion. ^^
Here she deals with the problem of being an apex predator in a work environment, as well as unfortunate accidents.
It's so hot where i am now! I really wish i had access to something very refreshing to dip myself in, like a bath tub full of ice. >-<
Anyway comments and criticisms are welcomed ^^
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Posted by corruptedcroissant 3 years ago Report
Gotta say, her husband is really committed to Marion =)
Posted by carlj 3 years ago Report
When you love someone so much, you forgive the morning farts ^^
Posted by Joily 3 years ago Report
Damn! What a great story, bud! Loving it!~ Marion can be a little dangerous, it seems!
Posted by carlj 3 years ago Report
Much like any other predator, yes.
But at least she's trying, the poor thing.
Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report
falling onto pery accidentally lmao
Posted by carlj 3 years ago Report
An unavoidable tragedy indeed ^^
Posted by Matteo42 3 years ago Report
Hmmm, a mixed bag for me.
1, great writing. Objectively, I mean. No big mistakes, no bullshit my english teacher would nitpick over.
2, AV is easily my favorite thing
BUT
3, farts, sadly. Just not my thing at all
Posted by carlj 3 years ago Report
Understandable, i wanted to try something different with this character and i knew it was not going to be everyone's cup of tea, so if you don't like lots of farts that's totally fine ^^
I appreciate that you still enjoyed the story and you thought it was good, that's what matters the most to me, that people can enjoy my stories ^^