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Tags: begging Big Belly Blonde bones breaking Bones in scat Burping Cruel Pred deception Digestion Disposal drinking drugged prey F/F F/M Fatal Female Pred impregnation listening to a belly Male Prey Masturbation Off-screen vore Oral Vore Pooping pregnant pred pretending to be pregnant Scat Shitting skull in scat smaller pred taunting teasing toliet tricked prey Unwilling Prey Wedding Weight Gain Willing Pred
This was a fun story to write, and I hope you all enjoy it. Special thanks to my two fantastic, amazing beta readers,: IconVesari : and Teamfortress32 Who are why this story looks half as good as it does. Any remaining grammar or formatting errors are mine.
Comments really keep me writing, so it's greatly appreciated if you have any feedback.
I’m also considering taking prompts, so if there are any ideas you’d like me to write, comment below.
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Posted by bwill194 3 years ago Report
Yes!!! The king returns, loved this story so much. Loved the revenge plot, very gripping, and Ashley's apathy was *chef's kiss* perfection. Can't wait for the next one!!!
Posted by Trying124 3 years ago Report
Aw thanks!!
Glad you liked the revenge, Ashley certainly did.
Getting compliment like that from someone who writes such terrific stories as yourself really means the world!
And I think you’ll really enjoy the next one ????.
Posted by bwill194 3 years ago Report
Thanks dude! Funny enough, your story “Family Outing” is what inspired me to start writing, so ditto!!
Posted by rekleam 2 years ago Report
I liked the taunting part most
Posted by Trying124 2 years ago Report
So very glad to hear it! I always tend to love a good taunting pred lol.
Posted by Trying124 2 years ago Report
So glad to hear you enjoyed it! Thanks for leaving a comment it really helps!!
As for a sequel hmmm, I must confess I hadn’t even considered it until you mentioned it. But it is an interesting idea and you’re right it is an underutilised niche.
Watch this space….(or Ashley‘s belly which ever is more appealing)
Posted by Trying124 2 years ago Report
Well you certainly make a convincing argument! I think I probably will end up writing a sequel now, thank you very much for your comment which give me the inspiration! Try
Posted by Augustin 2 years ago Report
Wow. This is quality. I've been reading a fair bit of Stephen King lately, and your style reminds me of him. It's not often I come across a vore story with an actual plot. You could give this to someone who isn't "one of us", and I reckon they'd get over halfway before realising something was up. Might be a fun experiment.
Anyway - splendid story, hope to see more in this vein.
Posted by Trying124 2 years ago Report
I think I can say with all honesty that this is possibly the nicest compliment I have received on any of my work. I may fan of quite a lot of Stephen King's writing. And to be compared to him is a colossal honor and I really really appreciate it.
I think I'd avoid showing it to any of my IRL friends for fear of outing myself but you're right it could be a fun experiment. XD
thanks for the compliment. Is there anything in particular you like specifically about the story? So I can know to do it next time?
Posted by Augustin 2 years ago Report
It's my pleasure! I think what made this story really stand out to me is Earl himself. I begin by sympathising with him because he's the protagonist, then realise how much of a piece of work he is -- and then Ashley enters, seen through Earl's dull eyes. Even though I'm familiar with the conventions of the vore story, I didn't immediately think "oh, she's eaten someone", buse that thought would never occur to Earl, and by then you've made sure the reader's trapped inside his brain. It's very well done.
Aside from that, I was a fan of the last disposal scene (which is unusual, cause I don't tend to go in for that stuff). Too often I just write "bone-flecked turds" and call it a day, but you've got the pelvis and the jawbone! Pleasantly specific. Earl's death was also a highlight.