Posted by TheCyberEmpire 2 years ago Report

When I was first reading this story and saw the tags, I was like. 'Wait, Sienna and Kali? I thought this was a Nora focused story?' x3

When I was reading it, I was happy to find Nora already swallowed Team RWBY at the beginning of the story and letting out a gassy belch right at Pyrrha's face! seeing RWBY females like Nora burping at the another female's face is one of my favorites. <3

I was however curious about the accidental vore tag, I was thinking. 'I'm guessing one of the members of RWBY ate each other by accident? Or Glynda ate a few unlucky students?' xD

I was surprised when Nora noticed Cinder, Neo and Emerald respectively dashing in the Forever Fall Forest, is the Half Maiden, the Smol Ice Cream woman and the Gem Thief gonna have their own stories in the future? Or are they gonna have their vore scenes in the Nora focused story? I hope that the 3 women will let out some nice, loud and long belches of gas, if not. I'll still be happy at the gurgling and groaning guts. :>

When I reached the part where Glynda was doing BDSM, I was a bit flustered and blushing from the way how you described the scene, that one was my second favorite scene since Pyrrha fell into the room by accident and Glynda was stuffed inside the Amazon Warrior's womb, I wonder how Pyrrha felt during that. With her teacher slowly ((or fast)) entering into her womb, I was expecting the Headmistress to enter the stomach. But I was proven wrong! >:3

I just hoped that Pyrrha can let out belches of gas of her own in the next Nora focused story! But I doubt that would happen since the Blonde Professor is inside the Champion's womb and not her belly. Unless I was proven wrong? XD

I enjoyed the ending of the story with Kali already having a meal either by swallowing Sienna or doing the same thing that Pyrrha did to Glynda, except instead of through the pussy and into the womb, it's through the Belladonna MILF's large ass and into her stomach. >:3 ((Sorry for me acting a bit naughty. I hope you don't mind.))

Since the message from the Beacon Academy's system said that parents could come to the lodge to see their children's progress. I wonder if Willow will show up with a boozier belly with small amounts of food inside? I doubt Raven would show up since she is the leader of the Branwen Tribe, unless she shows up in her Raven Form? Unlikely, but I would still be happy for the other girls having large guts, filled with food, prey and gas. <3

And I just realized how long my comment is. :O I hope you like this very detailed comment and I can't wait for the next RWBY story! :D

I hope that MrMetroid will create art from the scene with both Nora and Pyrrha having large and full bellies and maybe along with Pyrrha watching Glynda, giving herself pleasure and the redhead cupping her breasts. The second one is unlikely, but the first one is most likely. X3

And, MrMetroid if you are reading this. I love your art! Can't wait for more of your RWBY art in the future! <:D

Yet again, I'm sorry if I act a bit naughty above 4 groups of text. I couldn't help myself, that. And Pyrrha and Kali are my favorite characters along with Yang, Willow and Glynda. :O

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Posted by CadenGallic 2 years ago Report

Apologies for the confusion, I just made sure to note all included characters. Glad you enjoyed it so much!

Honestly can't confirm or deny the villains getting more yet, I know the commissioner has plans but not 100% on them yet.

Also I am totally fine with long comments, I really appreciate them, thanks so much for taking the time to write all this out.

Posted by TheCyberEmpire 2 years ago Report

Your very welcome! <3

And, I hoped that their will be art about this story soon. Especially with Pyrrha and Nora both having large bellies. ^w^

And I really enjoyed this a lot. Hope their are more RWBY stories from you! :D

Posted by Apostolos 2 years ago Report

Well I won’t confirm or deny any of your suggestions, but i do plan for more than just Nora as a pred, but she will continue to be a primary focus going forward though. Also most of the characters you mentioned will eventually show up but that’s for later.

Posted by TheCyberEmpire 2 years ago Report

Oh okay! ^w^ I can't wait! :3

Posted by Apostolos 2 years ago Report

Should have next one in the works with Caden between August and September if things permit

Posted by Bellyl0ver 2 years ago Report

I wasn't expecting Pyrrha pred to be honest. With how the story was written, I thought she'd either become prey or Nora's personal belly worshipper. Regardless, I like where this is going.

Posted by CadenGallic 2 years ago Report

You can thank the commissioner for that one, they wanted to get her in on the action.

Posted by rotta287 2 years ago Report

Yo, the Blake Burger idea was pretty funny to picture in my mind.

Plus, cartoonishly large bulges are pretty fun.

I like this.

Posted by CadenGallic 2 years ago Report

Glad you enjoyed it! I was seeking ways to make the swallowing more interesting since this is part 3 of the series so hearing you enjoyed that means a lot.