In the instance of the vermillion shields and tunics, that is a coincidence - me using the same color twice, which is a mistake I should have caught.
Maybe? I need to reread the parts with the Djinn. In case you weren't aware, most of my notes are mentally-stored rather than digitally-/physically-.
I do like my comic relief, but there are some dramatic moments you just shouldn't ruin with humor.
I hope you do. Like I said early on, I did post a reading order, recently. Some of the stuff in there might have elucidating information to the main series.
I recall it being in the part with Terrica, Lauren, Cammia, Valentina, and Oflexhun on the stolen Estranged vessel, but might have been later. What I know for a fact is that Terrica was part of the conversation.
Posted by Slayerhero90 2 years ago Report
4 hours ago. That's how long ago this was posted at the time of starting.
Hm. Bet I'm actually early enough that you'd make corrections for things I point out.
“There is not one of us in this entire place who wouldn’t. We feel it in our bones. Your existence does not preclude ownership.”
Improper usage of "preclude". Preclude is synonymous with "prevent". Would suggest a word like "necessitate" or "entitle".
“I’m surprised you evoked that,” Lauren told her.
I think you meant "invoke". You would evoke an emotion; you would invoke a right.
Anyways... well fuck, guess I gotta wait for the rest.
I may or may not check out other works in your gallery sooner or later.
Posted by VoidInVoid 2 years ago Report
In the instance of the vermillion shields and tunics, that is a coincidence - me using the same color twice, which is a mistake I should have caught.
Maybe? I need to reread the parts with the Djinn. In case you weren't aware, most of my notes are mentally-stored rather than digitally-/physically-.
I do like my comic relief, but there are some dramatic moments you just shouldn't ruin with humor.
I hope you do. Like I said early on, I did post a reading order, recently. Some of the stuff in there might have elucidating information to the main series.
Posted by Slayerhero90 2 years ago Report
I recall it being in the part with Terrica, Lauren, Cammia, Valentina, and Oflexhun on the stolen Estranged vessel, but might have been later. What I know for a fact is that Terrica was part of the conversation.