Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

It's certainly one of our longer chapters, so hope you have time to spare. Maybe get some popcorn.
...No Ruby, these are mine. Ask Weiss for some.

Posted by TheCyberEmpire 1 year ago Report

Ruby: ";w; Okay.."

But besides my little RPing there, the chapter is amazing! :D Can't wait for the next one! :3

Will there be art in the future? =w=

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

I'll have to see, but I am going on vacation soon, so it may take a bit.

Posted by TheCyberEmpire 1 year ago Report

Okay! Hope you enjoy your fun vacation! :3

*Gives cookies and milk.*

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

I would ask for an alternative ending where cinder succeds if that is alright

Posted by Xzsam 1 year ago Report

I second this, but obviously you don't have to!

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehehe...
If the demand is high enough, I may write it up.
...
F*ck it, I may end up doing it regardless. The potential is too much~

Posted by MoonColva90 1 year ago Report

Yeah, alternate endings would be interesting. Just short little chapters instead of official ones.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Working on it as we speak.

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

I look forward to it

Posted by PrimeLvl37 1 year ago Report

I think some different types of Vore would be interesting as well as weight gain measurements for characters who have digested what they vored and if you do decide to do that a joke bit would be the weight gain would only affect certain areas of the predator's body like a obvious joke is for Blake all the weight gain would go to her ass.

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Thanks for another great chapter. Here are my thoughts.

First, great job actually making Cinder intimidating in the story. Felt like her debut in the show made her very flat. Especially compared to Roman Torchwick who felt like a much more engaging villian. When she seduced and later ate Mike while casually looting his wallet, I actually felt the threat she carried. She knows how to kill someone and get away with it. Also a great way to add tension later in the chapter when it is Ruby who has to escape. The little touch of Cinder's belly being smaller later in the chapter was a great touch.

Liked Weiss' compromise of eating Ruby after she eats Blake. Weiss and Blake still hate each other right now but that doesn't mean they don't mind cuddling inside each others bellies.

Did a great job with Penny's character. Super perceptive in certain ways such as being able to see they were being observed by Sun in the trees. Yet lacking the social cues of humans or easily falling for Cinder's lies.

And just like with Mike at the beginning, fully believed Ruby would not expect to be kissed by a stranger. It's understandable her mind was working slowly to figure things out and was made just as easy as a meal to Cinder. Though you also give Cinder some personality where she is a terrible liar and a real glutton for not just shooing away Ruby and instead went with eating her despite being in a crowded environment.

Also like how Yang came to Ruby's rescue. Punching Cinder so hard to send her flying off, team Rocket style. Had her team not shown up, the story did a great job convincing me that Ruby would have died.

Also loved Roman's character as well. He has a gun pointed at his head and half his body is inside little Red's body. He should be freaking out, yet maintains his cool and manages to escape on his own thanks to a nearby distraction.

Loved how Ruby got to dine on White Fang members. Giving her belly nice and full and a great call back to the first chapter of when Ruby was in almost this exact situation. Though if I did have a nick pick, am a bit disappointed Ruby was not scratching her bra or shifting her butt uncomfortably as her assets expanded with more calories.

And once again, really liked Roman's character. Those little moments of him lighting a cigarettes to burn off steam. How he laughed when he learned Neo stole some money from Cinder.