Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

Hmmmm thats strange i wonder how the emerald picture fits in then.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehe, well you'll have to wait a bit longer for that to come into effect.

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

I mean like it might be the next chapter so still excited. And i like the chibi reference at the end didn't know about the singing bear one though.

Posted by Hibben 1 year ago Report

Ruby continues to be a good influence upon redheads, although Pietro is probably in for a shock when he hears what kind of uppgrades Penny would like.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehe~

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Sorry for dragging my feet on your request to review Chapter nine. Here it is.

Do want to give you a bit of credit for not making the board game immediately decend into a vore spree. They are in a library, a crowded location. Honestly, would not mine a future chapter where the girls decide to replay this video game and the losers get eaten by the one who defeats them. Would be a nice continuation of the board game. Might even add some worldbuilding as we learn what kingdoms do best.

Did enjoy the part Nora said, “Woman.” When referring to Blake. Whether it was her spending so much time around Ren, or just Nora being Nora, like how she is a bit different to everyone else. Agreeing with everyone that Blake is acting strange but there is no clear solution.

This next part relates to all the chapters. I have no clue the weight of the characters are in this vore centered story. The story mentions that Emerald is sporting a pot belly from digesting the White Fang traitor but we don’t know how it changed the rest of her. Does the weight all go to her breasts and ass or is it more spread out over her figure. This is something vore fans love to see on how big a character gets after a meal and what they are in comparison to other predators.

Did enjoy Velvet bonding with Ruby over eating the redhead and Ruby now swimming in beer. The beer belly was a nice touch.

Did find Ruby burping after eating two hamburgers a bit much. Want to save the big burps for the truly large meals.

And like I said in a previous chapter, having Ruby immediately be controlled by hunger (even after eating two cheeseburgers) and eating two innocents just rubs me the wrong way. These soldiers are not people. They only exist to be eaten by the main characters. Also, for soldiers they suck at fighting. Another reason I disliked it was Ruby’s two prey belly feels inconsequential during the fight with Torchwick. Thought such a large meal would make it hard for Ruby to tag team Roman.

Though did love the tease of Penny asking her farther for an upgrade to her stomach. Honestly, I can see why. Rather than always having to be powered by Aura, would be nice for Penny to have another power source to keep her running. That, and might even be an effective weapon against others.

Though with my previous comment of Ruby should be incumbered with such a meal, can’t deny I loved how creative the fight with Roman was. Ruby and Weiss swallowing each other to better launch the other out of their bellies like a gunshot.

Also really liked the banter between Roman and Ruby. Roman knows full well just how dangerous this little girl is. Yet still has the confidence to take her taunts and throw it back at her. Like when Ruby called Roman ‘dessert,’ he fired back like he was a gentlemen ‘As much as I would love to talk things over dinner, I'm afraid we must be going now.’ You did a great job capturing Roman’s personality.

Did love the part Ruby is planting ideas that Weiss likes being a belly pet. For one, great reference to the RWBY Chibi. Second, completely matches Ruby’s personality of always being positive and encouraging. Even if that encouragement is encouraging her team to willingly crawl into Ruby’s tummy. The shirt with ‘Ruby’s belly pet,’ was a great touch.