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A Semblance of Gluttony ~ Ch. 8 By Egads -- Report

The first chapter that takes place in V2 is here! This one takes place during the first episode, so it's obviously a lot shorter than the previous chapter. And let's just say we had fun during the food fight bit~

That said, hope you enjoy this chapter!

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jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehe, yeah. This was a fun chapter to work on.

Egads

Posted by Egads 1 year ago Report

Absolutely! :>

Superdoge645

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

Neo is not gonna be happy with emerald if she heard that. I can imagine the rage already.

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Yeah, I can imagine that too.

TauForge

Posted by TauForge 1 year ago Report

Is there gonna be a side story for emerald one day?

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

If the opportunity presents itself, perhaps.

Tuck4096

Posted by Tuck4096 1 year ago Report

Question. What is the relationship “Map” in this story?

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Relationship Map?
Can you elaborate please?

Tuck4096

Posted by Tuck4096 1 year ago Report

like who is dating who

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Well, it has been a while and we got some relationships going by this point. However we don't have anything concrete at the moment.

Davyjones

Posted by Davyjones 1 year ago Report

Awesome!Love how you integrated the food fight. Especially Ren sliding into Weiss like that, half expected for Yang to fall back down and someone gobble her up before she hit the ground.

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Dang it, that's a missed opportunity on our part then. Oh well~

Glad to see you liked it.

Cynder13

Posted by Cynder13 1 year ago Report

So I just want to be sure

So is this whole series gonna retell the series but with vore as well? And don’t worry not complaining i really like what I’ve seen.

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

More or less, yes. But It's likely that the story will eventually take a different route if things diverge enough from the main canon. We'll have to see in the future.

Cynder13

Posted by Cynder13 1 year ago Report

So I see

Since whole I haven’t seen beyond vol 1 I do know that certain characters die as well

So is that going to stay the same?

jyoster

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

That's yet to be determined. It could happen as it should, or it could end up going in a completely different direction. It's a journey of the unknown for everyone involved.

Goldendevil21

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Sorry for not reviewing earlier Chapter 8 but here are my thoughts.

First, thanks for that little part about Nora trying and failing to eat a Beowulf. Just feels like that nails her character. Always trying to do wacky things and stretch her limit. Yet she does have limits and is trying to overcome them.

Also do like how you honored the lore of RWBY by having Ruby talk to the grave. That was a nice touch. Felt like the lore of later seasons was wishy washy with how the backstories work with the world of Remnant. Can't go a season without learning about a 'great power.'

The story can get a bit boring with the story telling us characters are close. Like the line, 'Pyrrha said as she could be seen holding Weiss's hand as the heiress smiled back at her. The two of them have gotten really close over the summer.' You could have thrown out the last sentence and the scene would have done its job.

Also loved the food fight. For one, just admired how creative everyone is in the fight. Just like in the origional, they used their semblances to gain an edge in combat. Weiss using ketchup and mustard bottles like a glyph attack. Pyrrha throwing cans around with her control of metal. And you add your own spin as well. My absolute favorite part had to be Nora kicking Weiss in the stomach and causing Ren to be free. Just love how eating someone can have both positive and negative consequences. How your are now a bigger target but you also eliminated an enemy.

Was so expecting you to end the fight with Yang falling into Ruby's open mouth but was surprised you didn't. Not a good or bad thing, just surprised.

My favorite character moments were with Roman. His line of "At least she fed you before coming over, cause I forgot to buy dinner. Oh the struggles of divorce." Here, he equates a business partnership with Cinder to a messy divorce and I love that. Showing how he is not a fan of this alliance. Yet also always willing to add a bit of humor into the situation.

(Am a big fan of Red vs Blue and loved the Puma mention.)