Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

It is great but you know what every is thinking a alternative where that wf grunt escaped with a filling ruby meal. Don't have to this was great stil excited for the emerald image.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Mmmm, I was thinking of making an alt where the WF grunt gets away with it. Maybe if I get the chance, I may do it. No promises as I've been busy lately.

Posted by CrossboneKaiKai 1 year ago Report

Building on the comment below:
The ultimate bad end, where the WF grunt gets them BOTH and gets away with it

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Heh, another idea that crossed my mind. Perhaps I may do both. But it's hard to say at the moment.

Posted by Xzsam 1 year ago Report

Wow, this chapter is great! I always look forward to updates on this series, and you all never disappoint!
I'll admit that I third the White Fang grunt side chapter, but please don't put yourselves out over it, please take your time and take care of yourselves!

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Pfff! I find it hilarious that the standout moment in the chapter is the one featuring the WF grunt. That's something that neither of us were expecting.

Posted by Egads 1 year ago Report

You and me both lmfao

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

Well my reason is quite simple i just love background characters getting main characters it is so rare. Also glad i am not the only one.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehe, I suppose that is a solid enough reason for that~

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Hey. Sorry for skipping my review of Chapter nine. Will go back and review it if you wish. Just wanted to share my thoughts on Chapter ten.

Thanks for the little catch up to show us where we are since the last chapter when fighting Roman Torchwick. Helps us understand when we are in the story.

Also just love the idea of Beacon putting teams of two together from different schools and asking these teams to survive together in the Forest. Man, what a cool idea. A way to build trust with the other schools and also a great way to test how well these huntsmen can handle living away from civilization and on missions. I wish so bad we had more of these events before Volume three.

And already said this before but love how immobile Ruby was after eating two giant Ursa. Those things were huge in the show and can imagine Ruby was so huge she couldn’t even walk. Just love this trade off of Ruby can swallow the Grimm whole with her semblance but struggle with digesting them fast and has to wait for her belly. Just really enjoy this trade off.

And did like how Cinder, struggled with catching a fish at the riverbank and falling in and being eaten by Ruby. For one, make the environment feel like it plays a role in the story. This is not a five-star hotel. This is the wild. Second, feels fitting that Cinder is weak to water. Third, was so sexy to see Ruby use her semblance to eat Cinder. To get a taste of the spicy meal. Fourth, also like how because Cinder did not get a good night’s sleep and was frustrated with Ruby that it made her clumsy enough to fall into the water. For all her pride of being a great fighter, appears wilderness survival was not something she is the best at.

Now, did have a bit of a problem with Cinder being shocked Ruby was a predator. And later in the story how the two became friends. At first, just did not like Cinder being surprised and shocked at Ruby being a predator. She serves a witch called Salem who probably eats a lot of huntsmen. She even ate her fair share of pedestrians. This should not surprise her. And also did not like how friendly the two were at the end of the chapter. Wanted their to still be animosity between the two. Ruby’s cheerful outlook a stark contrast to the ‘all for yourself’ attitude of Cinder. Now, I did like how they bonded after eating some Faunus in the forest. (Had a slight problem of Cinder attacking her own troops. Was hoping her own hunger convinced a short-term snack is better than long term animal allies.) Here, I would completely believe Cinder would save Ruby. Her death would raise questions on her and needs to keep a low profile. And they would bond over the feeling of a full belly. I do understand Ruby would have experience with Weiss to open her heart and the two huntresses in arms would bond. The difference is Cinder is not a huntress. She is a monster planning the destruction of Beacon and millions of innocents.

Did like the part Yang was suspicious of Carmine. They did meet a few months ago but is hard to forget the face of the one who ate your sister.

Posted by Egads 1 year ago Report

Cinder having a soft spot for the redhead is a concept that me and jyoster don't see often. And so we decided to alter her character slightly so now she is a bit friendly with her, though I can understand if you have a problem with it. Not everyone would like the fact this evil monster is now being all buddy-buddy with their supposed enemy. But I personally think this makes the rest of the story more interesting so hopefully you guys aren't too bothered by it. This is a result of us reading a lot of Burning Roses fanfictions ^^;

Posted by Egads 1 year ago Report

And also, I'd love to hear your thoughts on Chapter 9 c:

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Thanks so much for liking my reviews. It is clear you and jyoster put a lot of effort into this story. Sometimes you even manage to outshine the original show on multiple occasions. For example, Cinder.

Now, I have not read a lot of Burning Roses pairings so yes, my bias is more towards the show. Still wanted to go into detail on why I thought Cinder was mishandled in this chapter.

Already went into how Cinder is a monster (both in the series and in this story. She literally ate and digested an innocent man who's only crime was being attracted to her.) but wanted to expand on that. Here, fully believe Cinder would bond with Ruby with their full bellies. They are both driven by gluttony and having that scratch itched. This makes for a great way for the two to bond. What I don't buy is Cinder getting cozy with Ruby after just two days. Their personalities just clash too much for me to buy they like each other. How Ruby is all smiles and rainbows where as Cinder is plotting and scheming. Also, Cinder is allied with the White Fang to bring down Beacon. What a cool way to show Cinder's pragmatic mind on display as she debates letting the grunts go or filling her and Ruby's belly. Maybe she looks down at her muffin middle and decides she needs to cut back on eating lackeys.

This is also a minor thing but hate how the story makes some characters special and others not. Now, in every story, you have major and minor characters. But in the story, no one should know who is a major and minor character. Yet the story constantly treats the White Fang as a snack dispenser and Cinder ate a civilian yet their deaths felt so meaningless to the story. When Cinder ate Ruby and started digesting her, that was when the series took the situation seriously. Makes the world feel small when only names characters are seen as people.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Thanks for giving us your opinion on the subject, appreciate this greatly.

In hindsight, it does make sense why you would be against the idea of Cinder and Ruby getting along so well quickly. Perhaps that's something that we could address later given the chance. We'll have to see now.

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

So new thought you could have that white fang grunt be like the deer Faunus that roman called deeree and she got likd one second of screen just a random thought.