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Lizzie's Workout Snack By DreamEater -- Report

Are you ready for another DreamEater Story!

Of course you are? Well this one features our favorite rowdy glutton named, Lizzie, as she finishes up another workout within her College's student gym. Thoroughly, she enjoys pushing her body to the limit in every way possible while attempting to grow stronger as a result. However, what happens when Lizzie spots some poor soul that she intends to use as a supplement to her exercise regimen...

Howdy! It's been a while since I wrote a story based on Lizzie! I had a lot of fun writing on her specific personality type, and look forward to expanding more on her character in the future!

If you want to read more about Lizzie's voracious adventures! Try reading "Lizzie the Glutton" Here: https://aryion.com/g4/view/898346

All Characters are aged 18+

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You guys are awesome and your many interactions and insights with my work keeps me writing free of charge!

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Mekachu

Posted by Mekachu 1 year ago Report

Finally, Lizzie is back!!! nice story, by the way, chibi DreamEater is so cute

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 1 year ago Report

Thanks! I’m glad you like it~

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 1 year ago Report

Seems like a bad idea to make a deal with Lizzie, I was cheering for sandy.

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 1 year ago Report

She was never great with impulse control~

doomed

Posted by doomed 1 year ago Report

theres a s song about poppy lmao

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 1 year ago Report

The music and shows within Dreamville are…odd to say the least, haha~

Assimilation

Posted by Assimilation 10 days ago Report

I've enjoyed quite a few of your stories, and I think your writing format is very interesting and often quite experimental.

In this story, I wasn't really sure what the intention was with how you did the writing voice for her inner monologue. It seemed purposeful to have an almost-robotic self-description against the very casual dialogue, but... I never really saw the payoff? The "dungeon master" ability looks like it could have been what this was all about, but the format in Lizzie the Glutton was a good blend of natural and Zorkish (i.e. in the vein of text-based dungeon crawls) without the stiff diction used for this story.

Remarkedly, the adverbial phrase overuse was very distracting to me. It was clearly intentional, since even an AI LLM wouldn't write like this without being specifically prompted to, but once again I couldn't figure out the motivation to do so. Just scrolling up, I see a paragraph that starts so many clauses this way--suddenly, recklessly, intensely, intelligently.

I don't mean to make this comment too rough, and I know this story's creation is over a year ago in your memory, but I'm curious to get any insights on your choices for this story.

Apologies if this would be more obvious had I read around your other stories. I fell in love with Lizzie in particular and am retracing her stories to recall her character before I read your newest story with her.

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 8 days ago Report

Oh, thanks for reading! I experimented a lot with first-person perspective in this story. I am an amateur writer with an analytical thought process, so I'm sure this quality bled through into the story. I also have a writing quirk with sentence modifiers that I am currently hammering out.

I appreciate you noticing this detail and giving feedback!