Posted by Tunknownusert 1 year ago Report

Glad to see you are writing again. Your story "Convenience", is still one of my all time favorites. Was hoping Carrie would juice her parents or something but such is life.

Posted by doomed 1 year ago Report

dang iu wish this was canon. its the perfect way for carrie to die. suffering worse than what she put her victims too all while being betrayed. its the epitome of a karmic death lmao

Posted by Zerobotz 1 year ago Report

I'd love to see more Carrie, whether cannon or not. Your stories continue to be some of thr best vore out there!

Posted by waitingprey 1 year ago Report

This is very good! I enjoyed it immensely, shame carrie didn't manage to get her hands free, wouldn't have minded if she got to rub one out at her own betrayal ????. Feel like it probably won't be long before Amanda makes her own trip to a toilet though, I quite enjoyed the disposal so thank you for including it.

Posted by Plgc 1 year ago Report

This is incredibly hot.

Posted by Nora 1 year ago Report

Absolutely adored this. 'What-if' type endings are just the best, especially for established characters.

Posted by Grick 1 year ago Report

You wove world building terms and anecdotes naturally into this story. Great job.

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I wanted to try writing a long rambling review on this story, when I first saw it, but I got distracted. I haven't read the other Carrie stories because I am picky and only like oral vore, and female prey.

I really enjoyed your story. The starting point of using the time when Carrie wakes up is clever. I like how Amanda is having trouble swallowing Carrie, and how Carrie is sarcastic when Amanda says that she didn't tie her up. It helps establish personalities, even tho I should know Carrie from the other stories. The details about blinkers are nice too. It helps add depth to the world and it makes sense. In a setting where digesting someone is legal, preds will want any advantage they can get. I appreciate the creativity of the scenario you put Carrie and Amanda in. Carrie doesn't want to be eaten, and Amanda wants to eat her to prove that she can be a pred. I like how Amanda struggles to swallow Carrie since she is a first time pred. Sometimes I think a pred should struggle to swallow their meals, and it wouldn't be easy the first time.
The details about how prey can be in denial, the roommate contract, "standard consequences for failing hazing", and BAW Banana, apple watermelon, add depth to your world, and make it seem like there is more to the world than just what is happening in the story. I like this, since it makes it easier for me to get immersed in the story. I liked how Carrie talks Amanda thru how to start swallowing her, by using the taper of her feet, and by repositioning herself. I really enjoy the details of the swallowing, and how Carrie doesn't feel fear, since reality hadn't sunk in yet. I also enjoy how you added details about Carrie's feet feeling the lining of Amanda's stomach. I like the part about Carrie's shirt getting in her face when Amanda swallows her, because it adds realism, and help immerse me in the details of the story. Little details like that can really add to the quality. The same can be said about Carrie pulling her arms and head down into Amanda's stomach in order to be able get her shirt out of her face and breathe.
After Amanda finally swallows Carrie she is much less enthusiastic about letting her out. This shows how pleasurable it is for a pred to have someone in their stomach. While I really like this, indigestion, and stomach pain, can also a good option in a plot. The pleasure of having Carrie in her stomach, helps make her want to digest her.
The fact that Heather talked about how much she owes Carrie for allowing her herself to be eaten by Amanda, heightens the betrayal that happens later. Of course it could be blamed on the alcohol, but Heather still betrays her later. While I like how you used the detail about 4% of preds losing their gag reflex the first time, I still think there are other ways that they could have gotten Carrie out of Amanda's stomach, IF they wanted to badly enough. Maybe Amanda could have swallowed the end of a rope, and let Heather pull Carrie out, but that would be uncomfortable, but it *should* work. I like how they could have called an ambulance, but decided not to. It makes it more of a betrayal, and less of it being unfortunate circumstances.
I like how Carrie's digestion is slow. I think fast digestion is overused, and a human would take a long time to digest. Having people get digested too fast breaks my suspension of disbelief, but whatever hand-waving power that makes same-size vore possible should make fast digestion possible, so I shouldn't be too critical. I also like how Amanda finds out that vornos are not reality, and that it takes more time for the prey to digest. Another detail that I like is how Heather enjoys talking to Carrie as she digests, and Carrie decides to stop talking to keep her from enjoying having a conversation with a woman dying in a stomach.
The part where Heather says "Your the best" to Amanda and it hurts Carrie shows how good of a writer you are.
I REALLY like how Carrie is still alive the next morning. Too many author use sleep as a lazy way to skip digestion, but you have her still mostly undigested. I also really enjoyed the casual conversation between Amanda and Heather the next day. There is something really kinky about people being casual when someone is dying in a stomach. The description of Amanda's stomach breaking down Carrie's body, and dumping her is hot too.

Anyways, this is a great story, and you are a fantastic writer. Even tho I probably won't like most of your stories, because of my picky preferences, I still gave your profile a watch, since I don't want to miss checking what your may write in the future.