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bag of devouring
 
 
Khana slunk along the back alley behind the tavern, her prize held tightly under her arm her head quickly turning from side to side to make sure no one was there before she took a closer look at the satchel in her hands, it was a rather nice bag, with it's blue and red pattern making the impression of a face if you looked at it right, she might be able to get a fine price just for the bag itself even if they didn't recognize it for what it was and Khana most certa

swords and sorcery - bag of devouring

Uploaded: 5 years ago

Owner: Chaosborn

Tags: Digestion dnd d&d Fatal ?/F Graphic digestion Object Vore object/f bag of devouring

Khana is a street thief who stole from the wrong man who uses a very unique security system.

So I was thinking does anybody just look through the monster manual or the dungeon master's guide and just say "you know I want to write a story about that".

any way please leave comments tell what you liked and disliked 

Chaosborn - 4 years ago

thanks for your comment this advice was very helpful

nervousvampire - 4 years ago

It's a good idea and rather well written, but despite it's short length it seems, off, a bit slow. Like the vore scene doesn't have the weight it should. Some more descriptors might help.
I'm not trying to be rude, so if I do seem rude I apologize

Divya shook as she looked into the naga’s black eyes, here she was in the middle of some forest, with sticks, leaves and mud tangled in her brown ponytail, her leather tunic was caked in mud and she didn’t want to know what else, sweat from the long trek dripped down off her forehead into her brown eyes, oh and she was about to be eaten by a naga and all because she had to go adventuring, she should have listened to her mother when she had told her not to sign up with the guild but

Swords and sorcery- snake snack

Uploaded: 6 years ago

Owner: Chaosborn

Tags: Oral Vore M/F Hypnosis Naga Unwilling Implied Digestion Betrayal Female Prey Human Prey

The life of an adventurer is dangerous and its not for everyone, there are oh so meny things just waiting to put an inexperienced traveler on the menu and not everything is as it seems, as one would be adventurer learn to her misfortune.

So I've decided to try my hand at a little vore writing and this is my first story, I'm always looking for critique to help me improve.

Happy vore day all 

hunter2045 - 6 years ago

Breaking up the text into paragraphs would go a long way towards making this more readable.

Otherwise, nice job.

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