“I think I see it, but it’s wedged
in there pretty bad,” the doctor said as she straddled a large dull
tooth, one foot safely on the ground while the other dangled in the
long maw of a wolf the size of the very hill it rested upon. Dan
sighed at the news as he glanced up at the wolf’s large yellow
watery eyes. The wolf hated having to rest awkwardly on the hill like
this, Dan knew, and she hated having to hold her maw open while
someone poked and prodded her ceaselessly. Every now and th
A Wolf at Heart
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Alright, so, needless to say my last story was not as well received as the first, and so an expedition must be launched to get to the bottom of this! After all, I want to improve not, um, dis-under-prove. Yeah, that sounds right.
Probably the lion in the room is the ending. In and of itself, nothing wrong with it. The original premise had simply been a shorter, light-hearted and absurd scenario where Ainsley bounded in, accidentally saved a town, was told she could have anything she wanted and, well, take a guess where that went. Truth be told, that probably would have been better received as it was more to the point and remained a good deal fluffier. But instead I found myself fleshing it out into somewhat fuller story, trying to add some vague sense of depth to it all. And...
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Posted by Mechdragon1k 5 years ago Report
Are you still on the site, whenever I see a page that looks abandoned I get worried, did they move on or get into trouble.
Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report
Thanks a lot for the watch! I appreciate it. :)
And welcome to the portal!
