Posted by IddlerItaler 8 months ago Report

The ironic name overlap continues. After Tana, I also have a character who goes by the name of Vivi (short for Viviva).

Was expecting the potion to actually be a shrinking one or for some other trickery to be at play, but I see the princess was true to her word.

Oh, we had a twist nonetheless - just because a predator can suddenly fit five people, it doesn't mean they can also digest them. Long digestion is fun.

"You humans sure do like your names with ‘a’ at the end, don’t you…"

As a Romance speaker, I felt that. Lol.

Posted by PaperWriter 8 months ago Report

Stop taking all the fun names >:(

Of course she was honest about it! As mentioned, her life and her home kingdom would be in some pretty major danger otherwise.

And bonus, it's not like the human alchemists were going to notice that fact either; "oh this snake is taking forever to digest this horse" like, yeah that's how snakes work... also shit I totally forgot a slow digestion tag.

Agh, -a names... they're the first ones to mind... every single time I try to name a character. It annoys me so much

Posted by IddlerItaler 8 months ago Report

"Of course she was honest about it! As mentioned, her life and her home kingdom would be in some pretty major danger otherwise."

Something something, human ingenuity and the will to go to any lengths to break free of their chains. I sorta expected the princess' brother to waltz in and storm the castle while Vivi was still too bloated and lacked lucidity. I know that it's a vore story and one can expect "and then the prey just digests" as the ending, but something about the narration just set off my "a twist is about to happen" senses. Maybe it was the sureness with which the princess commanded her entourage to be eaten, like she had a master plan?

Though I guess her master plan was just "Try and appease your shortstack overlords even if means being food." Can hardly blame her for that, it seemed like a no-win scenario and even if they decapitated the leadership they would've faced a terrible reprisal. For what it's worth, I wouldn't have rooted for a full reversal either way (the princess's folks triumphing and being the ones who treat Vivi's subjects as food and slaves).

Maybe my incorrect hunch came from the fact I've seen a story with a not too dissimilar premise - a princess offering herself to a haughty predator who had ambitions of power. It did contain a twist, and it was extra surprising because that author did go for "baddie wins" endings most of the time.

On a lighter note... It's-a-me, Eliz-a!

Posted by PaperWriter 8 months ago Report

Haha, I got you! The twist is that there's no twist, just a goblin gobblin' up tasty girls :P

I honestly hadn't really even considered a twist ending. I can definitely see how you might expect one though... when people start offering opposing monarchs strange vials you expect something to be going on. But nah, her confidence was a combination of determination and unspecified wizard stuff that made her okay with things going down the way they did.

A similar story you'd recommend, or just a similar story?

Posted by IddlerItaler 8 months ago Report

I'll take it to PMs for the other story.

Posted by Randomdude5 8 months ago Report

This was different. I liked how the new king gave something to Vivi, that she couldn't have gotten elsewhere. Having the princess be willing was the best option. The magic of the potion made it possible for the goblin queen to swallow all of the girls. I really like how Vivi had a poison detecting ring too. It helps with her drinking potions without having to take as many precautions. My mind wonders what would have happened if some of the princess's entourage had refused to be Vivi's meal, but that wasn't the way the story went. I like that each of the women had some distinctive features to them, because one of the problems of mass vore, is when the prey all become indistinct meals. Of course someone might see that as a reason why they like mass vore, but IDK.

I really like how you had Vivi unable to digest her beautiful meals even tho she could fit them in her stomach. I like how you used a potion to fix the problem, which another potion caused. I also like how the queen grew after she absorbed the nutrients from her meals.
One complaint that I do have, is that I would have preferred a few more details about what the princess and her subordinates were doing inside the stomach before and after they started digesting, but I assume that the story was supposed be short, and focus more on what the goblin queen was doing rather than her food.

Great story as always.

Posted by PaperWriter 8 months ago Report

Glad you enjoyed ^^

No poison-detecting ring, just a goblin nose, overwhelming power, and a handful of nearby antidotes.

Willing worked best for the story; magical or natural, it certainly made the unique gift much more enjoyable for the gobblin queen... though if one had decided to resist after she'd already gotten her first taste, the guards were still nearby, and I imagine that their "punishment" would have ended with them in the same position anyways :P

Bleh, same, that's one of the big problems with mass vore for me, having all the prey blend together. A small, varied group that all melts together... that's more enjoyable.

Potions fixing what potions caused was a fun little plot point... as for her getting bigger, well, she was going to get bigger one way or another with that much meat. Her evolving was definitely more interesting to me than her just turning into a chunky goblin.

Yeah, the story was more from her POV than an omnipotent one, so the digestion was more things that she would've noted along the way than a description of everything that happened... if I do a sequel it'll probably have more detail there, since I think a sequel would involve a bit more prey POV.