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For those that don't follow me, I occasionally do polls when I'm not sure what idea I want to write next... this was the most recent winner!
Maya is a naga, a student in a school far too far into the cold north for her... but one day, the board of her overpopulated school has an interesting idea to reduce the school's population, and for the first time in years Maya finds herself as a predator. A predator for a nice, warm mousegirl... just what a cold snake needed~
Given how slow I've been writing the post-vore parts I wasn't sure this would be done today... but I guess I found it in me to spam out what was left. Hope you all enjoy!
(Silly note: I've been trying to make each naga/lamia I create have different color scales and different personalities... the white naga was originally going to be kind of cold and aloof... but I don't have much experience writing that. So instead I realized, what if she was -literally- cold? And so... tada! That basically formed the base for the whole story!)
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Posted by doomed 1 month ago Report
oof poor amanda, killed for no good reason and was the catalyst for someone elses death lol at least she died aroused lol
Posted by PaperWriter 1 month ago Report
What's important is that she enjoyed herself in the end ^^
At least this ending only had her causing one other student to get nommed, the other ending I debated was gonna imply she kept eating students all winter, something like "By the time spring came, there was a new rumor every student knew; 'if you see a shivering naga, keep your distance...'"
Posted by doomed 1 month ago Report
ooof seems like that outcome still happened xd
Posted by DK2207 1 month ago Report
That was relly good read
Now I kinda want more of that pred
Posted by PaperWriter 1 month ago Report
Glad to hear that! :)
It'd probably be fun to write more of her... were it not for the small problem where I am absolutely terrible at focusing on/writing sequels... D:
Posted by Randomdude5 1 month ago Report
I enjoyed this story, and glad that you keep steadily writing new stories.
I like how Maya's cold blooded nature makes her struggle to keep warm in a cold climate. I also really like how the high student count is used as the justification for vore in the story. Since it isn't a human only world, the prey species could have evolved high birth rates to counter being eaten, but in a modern society, fewer of them might be eaten, and "purges" might be needed. I liked the little details how some prey had different reactions, and how the preds reacted when being paired up. Technically the teacher could have probably gotten away with not havign Amanda get eaten, but she also technically followed the rules. I like how Maya is gentle with her, and tries not to hurt her, even tho it doesn't matter. I also like how Maya finds Amanda to be warm, since Amanda has a higher body temperature than Maya. It was creative to have other students trip on Maya's tail after class. I wouldn't have thought about that, but it makes sense. I appreciate how you mentioned that nagas digest slower when cold, since this a real thing with snakes and other cold blooded creatures. Another thing I like was how Maya's mom was suspicious that she broke the school's rules, but then was proud of her, after she learned what happened.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 month ago Report
Thank you very much! This was a fun project ^^
I dunno if there's a lot for me to discuss there, but I'm glad you enjoyed the little details, 'cause dang there was a lot of them in this project!
The "people tripping over the tail" is the sort of thing that comes to mind a lot for me when I'm writing nagas/lamias, I like to think through as I go what kind of inconveniences a non-humanoid body would have in a world built for humanoids... like how in my mall story a while back, the side character that ate a humanoid got her prey's car keys / car and the main character that ate a taur just got a bus pass.
Posted by Perodian 1 month ago Report
Amanda could have survived if she had just kept her mouth shut, except for the fact that rules on eating people have been lifted. She could have been eaten anyways. Anyways, I liked the heat transference ideas. Maya gets cold easily but is warmed up by her prey. It gives her a reason to like predation outside of the instinctual feelings that eating people is good. I like when the racial features of non-humans are used.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 month ago Report
I'm sure that somewhere in the school was the prey that rejoiced making it through the "purge"... only to get nommed in their next hour by a pred that didn't get partnered up... ^^
Glad you liked the heat transference! Personally, if I'm using a decidedly inhuman race like a naga, I try to use that... if I'm just having them do things and act like a human would, there's no real point in not just having a human character instead :p