That is absolutely fantastic! Really, really excellent. It's imaginative, very well written; it has humour; a really great story.
Tiff and Mona make a very interesting pair. You've really given them personality, and made them into appealing characters. I hope we'll be seeing more of them! And I very much liked what you did with Cherry, too.
All in all, superb work. You're a very skilled writer. I enjoyed reading it, and I know I'll enjoy re-reading it as well.
Murrrrrrr, such a VERY wonderful story indeed... Purrrr, I really REALLY loved it a lot! Mona made such a wonderful pred, but then again, it sounds like most all of the girls are quite wonderful! And like they all quite like to swallow, digest, and utterly forget people as much as they can get to! ^^ Purr, what a lucky guy Gant was. I hope she treats him as he deserves when he reaches her toilet!
Hee, I am curious if she would act any differently towards her prey in a truly 'private' situation? She seems quite casual, playful, naughty, and predatirly hungry and merciless!
And I definitely wonder how much she is willing to talk about her poop, or to even show it to her next lucky victim, to give him a great idea of his future fate, and just what he is going to mean to her!
Very wonderful story, very easily one of your best! I really really liked it a lot!
Wonderful concept that typically isn't touched or well played out. I agree with atak in that Mona makes a sexy yet soft pred that you expose every bit of her from the pizza boy to her experience with vore for the first time with the Russian. Great amount of depth really bringing out the true body of the character! Nice work! Love to see more of this or even future works!
Excellent, very erotic story.
-Ramona's low-class, casual attitude was very sexy
-I loved the descriptions of what was going on inside Ramona throughout the piece
-The prey was appropriately pathetic in personality.
-I found the slang fairly hard to understand but I guess that's the local flavor :)
Your ability to make us love the Pred is uncanny. I really felt an affinity for Ramona, though my kink for antipodean accented bbws certainly didn't hurt.
And I loved the way you portrayed the vore service, particularly the menu and listing stomach sizes. I hope to see more silly details pertinent to voraphiles interjected.
And I found it really hot how she asked where Gant's country is.
Posted by French_snack 16 years ago Report
That is absolutely fantastic! Really, really excellent. It's imaginative, very well written; it has humour; a really great story.
Tiff and Mona make a very interesting pair. You've really given them personality, and made them into appealing characters. I hope we'll be seeing more of them! And I very much liked what you did with Cherry, too.
All in all, superb work. You're a very skilled writer. I enjoyed reading it, and I know I'll enjoy re-reading it as well.
Posted by jkssmtrfkr 16 years ago Report
Real nice - I like the sense of mystery throughout the piece...
Posted by atak 16 years ago Report
Murrrrrrr, such a VERY wonderful story indeed... Purrrr, I really REALLY loved it a lot! Mona made such a wonderful pred, but then again, it sounds like most all of the girls are quite wonderful! And like they all quite like to swallow, digest, and utterly forget people as much as they can get to! ^^ Purr, what a lucky guy Gant was. I hope she treats him as he deserves when he reaches her toilet!
Hee, I am curious if she would act any differently towards her prey in a truly 'private' situation? She seems quite casual, playful, naughty, and predatirly hungry and merciless!
And I definitely wonder how much she is willing to talk about her poop, or to even show it to her next lucky victim, to give him a great idea of his future fate, and just what he is going to mean to her!
Very wonderful story, very easily one of your best! I really really liked it a lot!
Posted by delet359hs56h2 16 years ago Report
Wonderful concept that typically isn't touched or well played out. I agree with atak in that Mona makes a sexy yet soft pred that you expose every bit of her from the pizza boy to her experience with vore for the first time with the Russian. Great amount of depth really bringing out the true body of the character! Nice work! Love to see more of this or even future works!
Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report
Excellent, very erotic story.
-Ramona's low-class, casual attitude was very sexy
-I loved the descriptions of what was going on inside Ramona throughout the piece
-The prey was appropriately pathetic in personality.
-I found the slang fairly hard to understand but I guess that's the local flavor :)
Posted by Luckless 12 years ago Report
Your ability to make us love the Pred is uncanny. I really felt an affinity for Ramona, though my kink for antipodean accented bbws certainly didn't hurt.
And I loved the way you portrayed the vore service, particularly the menu and listing stomach sizes. I hope to see more silly details pertinent to voraphiles interjected.
And I found it really hot how she asked where Gant's country is.
Great story!
Posted by thefatalenglishman 12 years ago Report
Love it. Thanks.
Posted by kbDArt 2 years ago Report
Like the story. Would have preferred the blond hostess got Gant for her snack, but Ramona also works.