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For the second time, I'm basing one of my stories on one of Zoekin's. Specifically, this one:
http://zoekin.deviantart.com/art/Old-Friend-86615843
Ranilla is originally Zoekin's character, although he never named her. He described her physically and laid the bases of her personality; I expanded on that, gave her a backstory and explained what she's doing in Felarya. The lines spoken during the conversation between Katrika and Ranilla are Zoekin's; in fact, that scene is taken from his story and re-described from Ranilla's perspective instead of Katrika's.
Katrika belongs to Zoekin; Crisis belongs to Karbo; Jora belongs to Ravana3k. Other characters are my own, except Ranilla I suppose, who is Zoekin's too. Felarya is Karbo's world. The places and scenery described or mentioned here are credited to Karbo and to other people who have contributed to expanding Felarya's world.
I think that about covers the credits. :)
I wrote this story because the character and situation that Zoekin created inspired me. I wanted to develop Ranilla further. Also, his original story hinted at a darker side to Crisis, which I wanted to explore in all its Felarya-esque moral ambiguity. So, many thanks to Zoekin, for his great writing which sparked my imagination, and of course to Karbo for starting this all off. :)
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Posted by Zoekin 15 years ago Report
Very well done!
I'm glad I could inspire you!
I based Ranilla on Gina Diggers by Fred Perry as a matter of interest. Although I'm sure Gina wouldn't hurt a baby.
Posted by French_snack 15 years ago Report
That was quick! Thanks.
I'd never heard of Gina Diggers, but, having looked her up, I can see the parallel. Ranilla wouldn't hurt a baby either, though; she would never *really* steal an egg. (At least, not such as I imagine her.)
When I read your story, I'd rarely seen an unnamed, minor character who looked so interesting. You did great work on her in just a few lines.
Anyway, thanks again for the inspiration, and I'm glad you liked this story!
Posted by Karbo 15 years ago Report
Yet another excellent story ! It's captivating and have some excellent idea ! I loved this idea of a Felarya museum :D
I loved also the gentle dryad and her naughty fairy friend XD
I am really very curious to see what will happens next ^^
Posted by French_snack 15 years ago Report
Thank you! Shelny and Enita were just intended as minor, one-off characters, but I suppose they could make a fun pair of friends if ever they re-appear. ;)
As for Ranilla... She's in serious difficulty now! We'll see what happens.
Posted by Squidia 15 years ago Report
Mmmm... To be honest, I don't really like this story. I thought I would, but....
We have a serious problem with this storyline. Our heroine is a likable character. Crisis is supposed to be a likable character. So when Crisis gets her panties in a wad because a human DARES to try and think of a way to survive..... I'm sorry, but I've read enough stories that make me want to kill Crisis. It.. it just doesn't work.
It's this whole mindset that turns me off of Felarya.
Don't get me wrong, it started off REALLY strong. But.... I'm sorry, that ending just... reminds me of SO much disappointment.
Posted by French_snack 15 years ago Report
Thank you for your honesty.
This story is based on one of Zoekin's which, if I recall correctly, you didn't like either, for the same reason. In fact, one of the reasons why I wrote this was because I felt troubled by Crisis' reaction in the original version. I didn't dislike it, but it made me react, and think about it. Which led me to writing it from the human's perspective.
Crisis remains likeable, to me. But she also has a darker side, that appeared in Zoekin's stories. She isn't "nasty", as such, but she can be cruel in her "innocence". I find that intriguing, and I wanted to show what it's like for a human caught up in that kind of situation.
The idea here, I suppose, is for the reader to sympathise with (and support) Ranilla, but without actually *hating* Crisis. Ranilla is likeable, kind, smart, good at surviving, and she's in severe danger from Crisis. It does put a different perspective on Crisis... but I'm not actually trying to make anyone *hate* Crisis.
Anyway, thank you for your comment. It was interesting to see what reactions this story provokes.
Posted by naruto7568426 15 years ago Report
Where can I find the continued part? Or has it even been made yet?
Posted by French_snack 15 years ago Report
Not made yet. It's on my ever-shifting list of things to do, but not near the top.
Posted by Shingami 11 years ago Report
I really wish you would make a second part to this
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
I probably won't. Sorry. The second part would normally be about Ranilla trying to bluff Crisis for as long as possible, while trying to figure out a way to escape from her. I lacked, and still lack, sufficient inspiration. And, as mentioned above, it would potentially draw me into fairly dark territory regarding Crisis.
In Zoekin's initial story (which is centred on Katrika), Crisis eventually finds out that there is no egg, that Ranilla is bluffing, and it's very strongly implied that she eats her.
I don't know whether Zoekin's story is still online somewhere; he's changed accounts several times, and currently goes by the name WhiskeyFox. If it's not, then you're free to imagine your own ending, in which Ranilla somehow survives.
Posted by Shingami 11 years ago Report
ok
Posted by Krauser 7 years ago Report
I was re-reading some of your earlier work and came across this. Did you ever finish it? Are you going to? If not could you at least tell me what kind of ending you would make the story have?
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
No, I never finished it. In Zoekin's story, it's heavily implied that Crisis eventually eats Ranilla when she finds out she lied to her. Part 2 of my story would have been about their interactions while Ranilla leads her to a non-existant egg and tries to bluff her way to freedom, but I couldn't make it work in a satisfactory way (regarding Crisis' character).