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Based on Scott Calico's short comic of the same name. It's autumn, and Elenor, the big bear gal, is hungry. And Bobby Hare happens to be in the wrong place, at the wrong time.
Inspiration comic:
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3983534/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3983552/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3983555/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3983561/ (Furaffinity account probably required)
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Posted by miranda_dragon 14 years ago Report
<3
Posted by Taris 14 years ago Report
i second that!
<3
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
Nicely done! That was a really good adaptation of the comic.
Posted by Herschal 14 years ago Report
Sweet monkey potato ScottC's back! And this was a lovely story, best with a bear pred I've read!
Posted by Bright 14 years ago Report
Good story, but I seem unable to access those pictures.
Posted by Bright 14 years ago Report
Nevermind, was a setting thing.
Posted by Dragga 14 years ago Report
...wow, I somehow missed the punishment. She eats a student, and only gets a day (and a half, I think) suspension? See, this is why I felt this one has some kind of hint at reforming. That is just WAY too apathetic a response to a murder. X3;
Posted by juicefox 14 years ago Report
Wow, just wow. I can't put into words how much I love this story. It's just so good in so many ways. In my mind it's the best vore story I've ever read, and I've read a great many.
That being said, I thought that the ending was a little weak. Don't get me wrong I LOVED the way things ended, but in my mind it just didn't add up. Like Dragga has said, a day and a half suspension doesn't make sense here.
In your story you say that the eating of another fur is unusual and because Bobby is a good student, I don't buy that the principal would let it slide that easily. Not without a good reason anyway. Considering the context, I think a great justification for this is bulimia.
Bulimia is a very sensitive matter in high schools and it is conceivable that a principal would let certain things slide so as not to encourage this sort of thing if it was becoming a real problem in the school (which isn't unusual in our culture that values thinness).
You could foreshadow this as Elanor leaves the lunch hall by her noticing someone purging, reflecting annoyance as some other girl wastes good food while she goes hungry.
Also the principal could have a greater motive for the suspension of the rest of today and tomorow. If he's going to let Elanor get away with this so as not to encourage bulemia in young girls, the suspension can be seen as a way to not encourage other students to eat their class mates by seeing the hard mass in her belly. The suspension ensures that she is kept away from the other students until Bobby is well and truely digested.
Anyway, that's just an idea, feel free to use it if you like but your story is brilliant in it's own right.
Posted by juicefox 1 year ago Report
It's funny, looking back at my old critism for this story. Because if you had written the story as I had suggested, I would not have loved it nearly as much. The unfairness and lack of concern for prey is what made this story so special back in the day. Which is why this story was one of the biggest inspirations to in my own vore writing.
Posted by KlinKitty 1 year ago Report
Heh, thanks! Funnily enough though, my own tastes have kinda gone the opposite way, towards more explicit reforming and playfulness rather than fatality and cruelty. But that's just the way kinks evolve, I suppose! To each their own~