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Outside the sauna door her footsteps stop, and so does the beating of my heart. A golden palm outlined in green presses up against the frosted glass, and I shiver from the anticipation. The door swings outward.
"There you are, Linda. Beautiful."
My heart starts again, beating like a hooptie bass speaker in my chest. She says it like 'beautiful' is my name, like I own the word, and I don't even feel like she's patronizing me.
Commission story for ShyGuy9. ~8400 words, F/f sex, oral vore, scat
This was a really fun commission to write.
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Posted by Shyguy9 13 years ago Report
Again, I love it! I'll be reading this story for a long time to come. <3
Also, you've really inspired me to keep working on the intricacies of Sophie and Belinda's relationship.
Posted by 4ofSwords 13 years ago Report
Excellent! Though it looks like you already had quite a bit of subtlety in your comic. :) It seems like you've put a good bit of thought into giving them believable, different personalities and backstories.
Posted by miranda_dragon 13 years ago Report
Sophie has a lot of qualities I like and I feel my characters tend to have some similar themes. But, the relationship with Belinda really adds a lot of depth that I think my characters are missing.
My characters feel so much more flat by comparison...though you do have a knack for expanding them and giving them life.
I don't think I'm going to get over this struggle any time soon.
Posted by miranda_dragon 13 years ago Report
I've just finished reading this and I'm not sure I can formulate how incredible this was properly.
Wow...
Posted by 4ofSwords 13 years ago Report
<grin> Well, I'm glad you liked it!
Posted by Imrhys 13 years ago Report
I second these comments ^^
Posted by French_snack 13 years ago Report
Ah, beautifully written! The prose is smooth and captivating. The expressing of the characters' emotions is excellent - vivid and convincing; simple yet powerful.
Posted by 4ofSwords 13 years ago Report
Thank you very much!
Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report
Well written, and I have to say this has to be one of the best scat scenes I have read on this site. I'm surprised and very pleased :) Others seem to enjoy the story as well.
Posted by 4ofSwords 13 years ago Report
Thanks! :)
Posted by Zyrian 8 years ago Report
Well now I'm sad, and a bit upset that the girl was led on like that.
Posted by Zyrian 8 years ago Report
It was still well written though